Reviews for Harry Potter and the Rune Stone Path
PaC chapter 3 . 4/20/2016
Good that the cannon bits you at least modified and changed slightly, canon
repeat/rehashing can get boring fast. A minor slip imo, what I call telegraphing Canon. Exsmple: you had Harry who barely met Neville, at most perhaps would have perceived Neville as shy, but telegraphing fanfics and Canon about Neville has him being someone who needed a friend ... reason for Harry to argue with the Hat to sort him into Gryffindor because Neville needs a friend. A bit of a fanfic cliche of the instant Neville with a friend, bit of encouragement, instsnt confidence, instantly rebuilt into a better stronger confident Neville. On a similar note even making Harry a runes avant. Bettet IMO, & more realistic, a gradual even if steep learning curve. Consider huge intuition, brilliant shortcuts in discovery, invention and innovation. Improvement building on knowledge. That you have books the runes professor gives Harry, obviously he does not know everything there is to know about runes by savantism. I think it's over the top that he instantly know rune methods more powerful, better than an ancient artifact, the cloak of invisibility as well as runes to do half of what the Philosopher's Stone can do. He's 11, Savant or not I think you are making it too simple too fast too easy. He can be a savant but still need to work, to learn, absorb past knowledge before building upon it as a foundation rather than instantly knowing and understanding so much. I think you've pushed too far too fast, giving him knowledge too much intuitively, rather than having the Savant intuition to metely more quickly advance, discover, innovate, build upon previous knowledge, rather than instantly being almost a rune god, to instantly simply know "the way".
Good non-cliche that should be, but seems most fanfic authors, maybe because Canon ignores the obvious, other than the blowing up Marge teenage rebellion and angry bits of angry angst Harry of Cannon, it's completely ignored how contrary to cannon, the obvious, contrary to Harry being Dumbledore's man through and through as he tells Scrimgoer, that instead very few fanfics do the obvious not a cliché, of Harry having a knee-jerk resentment if not hatred of Dumbledore for leaving him on the Dursley doorstep. Such an underused obvious foundation few use. Not even any need for "thieving" Dumbles, or evil and plotting Harry's martyrdom Dumbles. Weird, simply merely having Harry learn from Hagrid how he ended up on the doorstep, with Hagrid being there, a question leading to answerd, and Presto instant Harry hate for Dumbledore. Why no one notices this huge easy method to estrange Harry from Dumbledore, for fics following that path, escapes me, at least it didn't escape you.
PaC chapter 1 . 4/20/2016
Sur, other than Super Genius child Harry Age 2 or 3 reading his mother's hidden trunk in the Attic, I'd reconsider him being 10 years old,). A lot of fanfic seem to do this, perhaps so they can get a Hogwarts sooner, but one could always time skip the fiction then spend too much time or more time than the author preferred on the years before Hogwarts, by having Harry find out about magic a few years instead of one year or less, pre-Hogwarts. This allows you to have a more knowledgeable more surprising Harry when he does go to Hogwarts and/or more reasonably adept. That would be my only suggestion, consider him finding this trunk at least a year or two earlier, optional would be if you included more resources in the trunk, unless you're going to have him stumble upon a magic book shop
, so he might be a little more prepared than just with runes, that he studies up a little bit on Magic in general. If he's only gifted with rune magicks, it's not like you would change it much, not have him sorted, ready for his OWLs.
mwinter1 chapter 3 . 4/20/2016
Awaiting more.
plums chapter 3 . 4/20/2016
I really like what you've done here so far.

With Rons blatant jealousy and greed displayed about the cloak, why iisnt Harry immediately going to Shiva asking about security arrays for his trunk.

Also, Shiva, and Flitwick to some extent, seem to be growing into confidants. Why isn't he asking them for advice on the whole "abandoned on a door step against parents wishes" and the lack of a will reading? Harry is a much more confidant person than in canon, true. But I also think he's placed trust in at least these two adults as well.
INQ8448 chapter 3 . 4/19/2016
I like the story so far. It's good. I must admit tho, I'm a tad concerned with adding more girl's to Harry's pairing. I think Hermione, Fleur, and Nymphadora are enough. Just my opinion. Once it gets past three people, it becomes rather bothersome.
sid25 chapter 3 . 4/19/2016
hey! this is a fantastic start.. really enjoying your story. premise is really good. if you don't mind just a small correction. Lord Shiva is the Hindu God of destruction, not a goddess. just wanted to let you knowotherwise keep updating :D
Smithback chapter 3 . 4/19/2016
pretty cool
Red Archer chapter 3 . 4/19/2016
Awesome story, I love how you portray Harry and others in your story.
I especially love the way you bashed Ron.
I hope to see another chapter soon.
Guest chapter 1 . 4/19/2016
A good beginning I look forward to see your story grow and flourish.
jslee102 chapter 3 . 4/19/2016
Really interesting story
starboy454 chapter 3 . 4/19/2016
excellent story so far
keller.obriant chapter 3 . 4/19/2016
Great so far hope the relationship with McGonagall is improved in later chapters
Guest chapter 3 . 4/18/2016
If possible add luna, she is always a fun girl and she's smart funny , and best of all quirky!:)
AnFan-n-More chapter 3 . 4/18/2016
Great chapter, as always!

Had a thought of an idea you could use for runes later in the story if you run out of ideas to describe how the sequences work. Have you thought at all about how some effects could be achieved if you had some runes designed in such a way that they failed before complete activation? Sort of a temporary support to build up effect into the structure then fall away like scaffolding? I also had thoughts about it as how demolitions experts use timed and specially located charges to direct and control the destruction of a building. Not sure how that second one could work, but thought I'd mention it.

As a programmer, the thought of temp variables or procedures that are called and dismissed make a lot of sense to build up a final product even if the conditions aren't always the same. This could allow for a rune cluster to work while being portable. If a cluster is written for a set and stable location, than it can include all statements to cover all of the needed support for the final effect. However, move that location to a new area, and you could destabilize the ward or effect that is being attempted.

This could be a technique that is already in use, or it could be something that Harry introduces that could revolutionize the field of runes! However, planning failures into a rune structure, given the already stated difficulty of keeping them stable and non explosive could be something that no one else is capable of doing. Which would be a good fit for Harry being a savant.

I really look forward to the next chapter! Thanks a lot for sharing your imagination with us readers!
beachchand22 chapter 3 . 4/18/2016
yup Ron's a ass. but good chapter
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