Reviews for Thor Help Her
Tellemicus Sundance chapter 3 . 5/7/2016
As much as I'm enjoying this story, I'm also NOT enjoying it. You're doing something that many good authors fall for (myself included sometimes) that hurts the story more than it helps. You're TELLING and not SHOWING. If you look closely at this particular chapter, you'll see only THREE (3) actual scenes that took place in it, all the rest was just a narration that would've been more appropriate in a play or something. Please try to SHOW more than TELL from now on, that's where all the best pieces and character development comes from. Otherwise, it's all just becomes a glazed over summary of a story
Dragonbow117 chapter 3 . 5/7/2016
As one of those aforementioned writers who attempted the time travel idea, (Attempted being the key word here). I have made all the mistakes one could possibly make with doing a time travel thing so I know all the things to watch out for and what not do to. And to put it simply, I don't think you need any of me help.

You're doing this pretty much perfectly, Love the twist of Freyja doing this though not 100% sure why. Cannot wait for more this is an interesting story and you've earned my follow :)

Though if you really want a tips list just for clarification here it is. (U don't need it but whatever).

1. Make sure your past/present/future is accurate, and clear. (You have this one down)
2. Continuity. (Also down though it is only chapter 3 XD)
3. Pacing. (You already mentioned this, I'm just second-ing the point)
4. Reasons. (Pretty sure you have this one down too.) Make sure there is a valid reason for them being thrown through time, without an explanation it's just... okay. But considering you already have the foundations for solid reaosning. (The Gods/Freyja) We pretty much have it all we need are the motives of said Asgardian, which I have no doubt you have planned.

So like I said... You didn't need my help at all this is just a standard I hold time travel fics to. But yeah, Enough of my ramblings I look forward to the next chapter.
GreenBlueCat chapter 3 . 5/7/2016
Hiccup The Beast. XD
I definitely want to see/read the reaction when Hiccup finds out that twins KNOW about them. And parkouring Hiccup! YES!
I do have question, why only on his shirt when sleeping? I would understand if he was only on his leggings without shirt when sleeping but other way around. O.O
Mikybel chapter 3 . 5/7/2016
You are the best, but i love hiccstrid and i liked more hiccstrid _ PLEASE MORE HICCSTRID!
i am uruguayan, speak spanish, for this reason i'm soo bad wrhiting, pleas don't hurt my!
Resisting-Moonlight chapter 3 . 5/7/2016
Well at least Astrid knows now how "close and evidently LOUD" their relationship is. ;). Heehee no one Hiccup is wondering what's going on with her. He's cut off and not sure what he's done.
Sapphire chapter 2 . 5/7/2016
I am really digging this story! It's a concept I've seen done for a lot of fandoms that doesn't usually sit well with me, but so far this is turning out quite fantastic with some great character analysis so many other stories are lacking. I love the way you're capturing the characters and your writing style is absolutely beautiful. Keep up the great work, I'm very excited to see how this continues to play out.
UnbreakableWarrior chapter 2 . 5/6/2016
Well,in general I like this part because is amazing seriously congratulations
UnbreakableWarrior chapter 1 . 5/6/2016
Well this first part is amazing,seriously in general I like a lot the attitude of Astrid because she is so good in all the moments of this chapter.
amberanne9 chapter 2 . 5/6/2016
This is brilliant! I love the way Astrid is handling this! (or trying to) as a strong resilient and very stubborn Viking woman. And Hiccup is of course hotness. YAY please keep going!
Karina Reche chapter 2 . 5/6/2016
Sorry, my other Review wasn't finished hah.
Sooo.. Maybe Hiccup could be a little bolder or have dirty jokes with her when they're alone, but first she has to demonstrate that she trusrts him, so I understand you not posting somehting smutty so soon haha..
But well, great job, this is fantastic.
Karina Reche chapter 2 . 5/6/2016
Hey, this is an amazing idea! Please post as soon as you can...
Maybe you could make Hiccup be a little bolder or make dirty jokes when they
Guest chapter 2 . 5/6/2016
Good, another chapter! Thank you. I hope Astrid figures things out before things get too complicated.
Nina chapter 2 . 5/6/2016
Love it again! Loved the kiss! I need another! And poor Astrud she doesn't know what to do
Mia chapter 1 . 5/6/2016
Loving this story!

Just ignore those rude reviewers, some people are rude just for the sake of being rude. This story is better written than compared to a lot of other stories on this site, keep up the good work :))
GreenBlueCat chapter 2 . 5/5/2016
Poor Hiccup XD
It seems he is very good at kissing and cuddling. Hope Astrid gets past of her bullheadedness and goes with it.
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