Reviews for Survivor
tristan61 chapter 3 . 12/1
No good
you have taken too much freedom with this story...
too many mistakes et incoherences.

No good really.
belle hawk chapter 15 . 12/1
I will have a criticism about your portrayal of Harry. At the beginning, he was the epitome of honour, respect and coolness but now he sounds the opposite of it, too cocky and disrespectful. Don't know about others but what makes this story enjoyable for me was Harry's personality and morals at the beginning of the story. How his being a part of another pantheon affected his personality and how he approached the events, that was very enjoyable to read. I may be wrong but I get the idea that you are trying to finish the story quickly and it may affect how you write your characters
Guest chapter 3 . 12/1
You are moving too fast without transitioning scenes so it looks and reads horribly.

Have you tried reading your own story? Its horrible right?
Mistakes made chapter 2 . 12/1
Recheck the chapter please and fix the many errors you have.

Instant changes of locations without thought or reason confuses the reader.

One second you have the motorcycle disappearing into shadows but then the motorcycle is still there for Harry to use.

You are missing conversation quotes on some parts making it hard to know if someone is talking.
Penny is wise chapter 14 . 10/11
Awesome chapter.
Guest chapter 14 . 10/7
Well done.
Penny is wise chapter 13 . 9/11
Awesome chapter..
Jfitzgerald chapter 14 . 9/7
This is the same as chapter 13.
Penny is wise chapter 12 . 8/15
Awesome chapter.
Kitsune95 chapter 12 . 8/12
Penny is wise chapter 11 . 7/31
Awesome chapter..
pie480 chapter 1 . 7/30
You uploaded ch 10 for ch 11.
joshua.obryan.549 chapter 11 . 7/30
um...this is akward but I regret to inform you that you uploaded chapter ten instead of chapter 11 which I surmise is what you were intending to put this is akward to say
Ranmaleopard chapter 10 . 7/16
As always this is just really interesting keep it up
Gime'SS chapter 8 . 5/21
thanks for the update
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