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Did you intentionally nerf Gamer's Body for your fic?

would have been hilarious if peter pettigrew was the boss rat of the sewers. maybe even funnier if the boss rat was named wormtail, lol

so is harry going to be seeking mrs. polkis out himself then, once he gets older, that is? lol

why is harry's mp so low? i get not having it be like a thousand or more, but surely something like fifty or even a hundred wouldn't be to bad, would it?

is sue storm the character susan storm from marvel's fantastic four, or is she inspired by her?

Gracias por la historia, la verdad me gustó mucho hasta donde llegó, no tenía idea que había pasado por tantas reescrituras, pero para mí al menos el fic estaba genial y esperaba con ansias un nuevo capítulo, es una pena que decidas empezar desde cero, si te pudiera dar un consejo hubiera sido mejor que lo edites y salvar lo que ya tienes, después de todo tú mismo dices que las actualizaciones pueden durar entre meses y años... Ni modo, en fin gracias nuevamente y ánimo para la nueva historia. Un saludo.

Thanks for the story, I really liked how far it got, I had no idea that it had gone through so many rewrites, but for me at least the fic was great and I was looking forward to a new chapter, it's a shame you decided to start from scratch, if I could give you some advice, it would have been better for you to edit it and save what you already have, after all you yourself say that updates can last between months and years... No way, anyway, thanks again and good luck for the new story . All the best.

Well, I was finding this story interesting until the underage sex. Harry is 11 and shouldn't be doing anything like what was described. I could say so much more about what was wrong with that scene all I'll say is I find it disgusting people keep adding those in Harry's early Hogwarts years.

Okay.

OWNED!
AHHAHAHAHHAHA
x2 Archleone

You started off well until... Sue Storm...Really? SIGH

I don't really see the flaws you are speaking of. It was going just fine for me a good mix of pervy with plot a dash of skills here and there.

tho I wonder if you can add a Hogwarts dungeon such as the forbidden Forrest

the lake or even the shrieking shack.

as for the party system you should add the other students. just exclude them from the party room or work it into the story as an awkward shenanigans due to their disappearance.

also you set up lots of steamy encounters and stopped for a rewrite right before that is not cool especially since I wanted to see their reactions to one another the days afterwards.

smut is great but if there is no attachment it is just bland in my eyes. nimue was a perfect example of it done correctly. no instant infatuation but something more primal.

so please reconsider the rewrite and continue

there are a mess of characters that would me perfect for the gamer system if you wanted to start from scratch.

for instance what would happen if the power were give to lina lovegod instead or heck even some one random like bill weasley.

well good luck and keep up the good work what ever you decide.

well sad to see this. your english is better then 3/4 of the "people" on this site now in days. as for the last chapter... it was VERY GOOD for a mostly lemon chapter, yet it expanded the story to come, gave hints about what is to come. showed what a real lemon chapter should look like! you should be proud of this story,

Damn, archleone just massacred you, and while I don't agree with how heated his/her review is I can agree with his/her points, you've written 80 something thousand words in what? 6 years?. This is fanfiction such things as dividing the story into books is unnecessary and almost feels a little old and out dated, there is no printing you need to do, no physical copies you oughta release, just make one big story.

And why make a gamer story in the first place if you don't know how to write one?

Man, fan fiction writers always bite off more than they can chew. "Book 1". You say this as if you'll ever finish it and start a "Book 2".

There's no reason to split things into "books" that are separate entries anyway. It's just attention whoring.

You're not even committing to writing this story at a decent pace. Why are you even bothering? I mean, besides wanting attention or hoping to drop a donation link at some point. This story was dead. It should have stayed dead.

You even admit that the story is going to be shit because your English writing skills are bad and your knowledge of games isn't great. What is the point?

It was a little ironic that you misspelled the word "flaws" when talking about how you'll be a fuck up but still expect false approval.

This story is for no one. If I want to read The Gamer, I'll just read The Gamer or the endless other manwha or other web comics or web novels with similar elements. I'm not that desperate for a crossover that I'm willingly going to read a poorly written story that the writer admits is going to be shit that never gets updates.

If you're lonely and want attention, just go make some friends.

please continue

Nicholas Flamel, also known as Druggie Nick, was born in the August of 1326 to a middle-class muggle family in France. Snatched away by a wizard named Joe King who recognised Nicolas' magical talent, he was raised under poor substances. He was taught of brutes that were muggles and the idiots that were magicals, and soon after his 18th birthday, he left his adopted parents, Joe King and Cho King.

Nicolas soon killed a family of rapists and took their home as his own, freeing the girl they were about to rape, Perenelle Wankum-Medick. With his new couple year older best friend, they lived and farmed herbs and fruits from their garden. Two years later, Perenelle married a friendly wizard, Vernon Dudley. Three days later, she returned with his head in her hand and a key to his Gringotts' Vault.

Three years later, Nicolas Flamel and Perenelle Wankum-Medick had gathered a sizeable fortune for themselves and she married another wizard, Henry Stickwomin. Nicolas happily arranged their wedding and sent her on her way. He then went back to his farm, which he called Greengrass, and started making more Potions and Spells, as was his hobby.

In 1354, Perenelle came to Nicolas, crying, telling him that Henry was dead. Nicolas consoled her and seized Henry's properties. Perenelle and Nicolas married a year later.

In 1356, Nicolas created a herb using Potions, he called it 'Cannabis' and it made him feel nice. Though, after becoming too dependant on it, he sold every single leaf of it to Alastor Dumbledore.

In 1364, Nicolas and Perenelle had a baby named Greengrass Flamele Henry. The boy ran away at the age of ten and took the name of Henry Blaze Greengrass, and never talked to his parents. Nicolas and Perenelle then started mixing Potions with Spells, since they were bored. Accidentally, Nicolas created a shiny red stone.

Nicolas soon found that the shiny red stone, made of Castration Charm's Formulas and Fertility Potion's Calculations, held the secret to unlimited healing. He and Perenelle then melted the huge stone fully and drank it fully.

Nicolas and Perenelle soon found themselves liking the flavour so much that they started drinking more of it. Rumours spread that Nicolas Flamel created an Immortality Drug named 'The Philosophic Stone', though Nicolas always said that it was 'Rabbit UnDeath Blood' and Perenelle called it 'Sex Six Stone'.

One side-effect of the Stone was an increased sleeping rate and an increased libido for both Nicolas and Perenelle. Appearing ageless and thirty at the same time, they mostly just fucked and slept, making potions and food whenever they liked. They met their first grandchild in 1390, a boy named Markus Greengrass. They left their Greengrass Farm to him before leaving for Greece as a long holiday.

In 1420, Nicolas and Perenelle had a girl, they named her Theta Flames. She was a squib, so they had to leave her with muggles. The girl later became Dorothea of Brandenburg.

In 1569, Nicolas and Perenelle entered Japan and had another child, she was another squib, her birth name being Jean Pan Flamela, she later became Tachibana Ginchiyo.

In 1692, Nicolas and Perenelle returned to France. Perenelle started teaching Enchanting once a month to students and Nicolas started looking into Manticores and Chimera's birth. They left after three years, realising that Nicolas was concluding that a sorceress Queen of Greece named Pasiphae created the annihilation.

In 1783, Perenelle and Nicolas sensed unrest among muggles and left for the safety of India, where only the English caused unrest.

In 1820, they reached America to closely study the chaos there. They had started mixing the flavour for the Philosopher's Stone since the old flavour was getting boring. There they met a nice man named Abraham Potter. He was extremely old though, with no kids, so Perenelle agreed to have kids with him. They left the Americas for Scotland in 1830, leaving Abraham Potter with Nicolas Potter, Joe Potter and Henry Potter.

In 1900, Nicolas was buying some muggle alcohol when he met a twenty-year-old Albus Dumbledore with his boyfriend, Gellert Grindelwald. Remembering Alastor Dumbledore all those ages ago, he invited them over to his house. Having a foursome with the two and Perenelle, they talked.

Albus was an insane man, with the ideals same as Nicolas, and Gellert was a man with mental disorders. They kept in contact with Albus.

In 1926, Albus came over, saying he wanted to learn Alchemy, something Nicolas and Perenelle accidentally became masters in. Nicolas taught him while Perenelle made money for the family.

In 1937, Albus came over for drinks, after meeting a brat named Tom Riddle. The three had much fun finding a woman to have a foursome again.

In 1940, Albus came over to cry over Gellert becoming a Dark Lord. Nicolas gave him some weed to smoke and Perenelle gave some meth.

In 1945, Albus ran in, shouting he got Gellert with him. They had a foursome before Albus had to leave with Gellert to shut him in his prison for eternity.

In 1975, Albus came over, cursing Marauders over torturing some Snape and a monster tree. Nicolas told him about Abraham Potter and Albus fucked Perenelle right in front of Nicolas to torture him.

In 1981, Albus came with baby Harry Potter, saying he wanted Nicolas to spell him safe. Nicolas did everything he could and even added a bit of Philosopher's Stone in his blood.

In 1992, Albus came running with an unconscious Harry Potter with him. The boy was bleeding and Albus was cursing the fact that the boy absorbed the Stone. Perenelle immediately began sucking the boy's penis to suck the Stone out of him. Nicolas performed the spells and Albus performed the rituals to make him healthy.

In 1994, Nicolas found a fella named Peter Pettigrew and took him home, because he seemed lonely. The man was bad because he killed Perenelle right in front of him and running away after becoming a rat.

In 1995, Nicolas met a man named Lucius Malfoy. Remembering a Philip Malfoy, a dick, from Beauxbatons, a male Veela, he immediately started panicking. He was kidnapped.

In 1996, the last thing Nicolas saw before a flash of sickly green light was the face of Lord Voldemort.