your writing is truly infuriating because you just cant seem to get to the fucking point. it breaks up your plot into a bunch a dissjointed rants. meh maybe its just me

well that was an absolutely horrible first chapter. it was like 5k roundabout angst and drama to say he was reincarnated

I think I remember leaving a discouraging review a few years ago about not letting issei keep the boosted gear. Must have been because I was used to semi-competent fannon issei instead of anime issei. Gives him a chance to learn humility and build his power-base up from nearly nothing like sairorg did. And sairorg is a badass.

The “It was all an experiment” thing seems kinda forced and lazy. Like you couldn’t think of or be bothered to try and make up something realistic.

I didn't know there was a thing as too much detail until I read this

finally done reading..
my first thought after finish the chapter 18 is...
im tired..
too much monolog..
i want to skip it..
but by doing so will make me confuse about what happen..
so i try to read all of it..
but still make me confuse of some part..
your way of writing is almost the same as monogatari series..
i need to use my brain to read this novel..
ahahaha..
clearly not a light novel..
even tho you make dxd fanfic..
but well.. even with all headache that i get while reading this..
i find it that this novel is great..
and loving it..
ahahaha..

The story is certainly very good, but there's just this odd issue of visualization. I can't easily visualize what's happening. It's probably about the text density or event flow, but I don't know. Irregardless, this story is well written and miles above the other harem, prepubescent, low effort, and trash grammar, DxD "OC's".

When will you com back fanfiction?

I would rather stay with the harem than Rias, never liked her just saying or Issei.

I'm tired of the bullshit. They tried to kill him, still he is wagging his tail in front of rias. he should have just ended it after beating issei. Also, attacking azazel and vali for rias? seriously bruh? and way too much monologue and extra info , makes me bored af

it would be awesome if he used meta knowledge and what not to Bogart Issei. shouldn't even be too hard based on your explanation. For example, he could get Issei to sign a carefully worded magical contact or just a carefully crafted spell that doesn't require him to input more than the startup power. he could then use this too do pretty much anything such as acquire Issei's sacred gear or his potential or whatever just so we don't have to put up with the pervert and his illogical power gains and how stupid it seems to make all of the women around him. because honestly I think that is what makes me dislike most dxd fics the most is how the women are complete wastes of space who fall for Issei and his 'good heart' or whatever.

shit

I really like how the mc munchkins the magic system

A little criticism. You put too much detail around everything, to the point that it starts becoming a chore to read. We don't need a few paragraphs describing one attack. Sometimes less is more.

The entire premise of this chapter is incredibly stupid. No one is going to jump to the conclusion that he's a body snatcher.