Reviews for Silly Songbird |
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![]() ![]() ![]() genial capitulo |
![]() ![]() Glad to have you back mate, for what's it worth. (as i am to lazy to login) my vote goes for option [2] "power through, row row fight the power!" Intriguing as usual, and your boy is closing in on 'satan' class?! Well Sirzerchs for sure ain't pleased. Thanks for the update! |
![]() ![]() Good story brah |
![]() ![]() My dude you really gotta pet readers have a moment of catharsis or we gonna explode. Or give flaming reviews whichever is first. Like in the last chapter, it was a nice bit of catharsis to have Riser go to town on Katerea and her army and really flex is stuff, letting readers breath a sigh after having to endure with Riser as he is constantly talked down upon by his brothers the Satans and basically everyone older than him. Then you took that tiny bit of catharsis and tore it to shreads by having Ophis bitchslap Riser and then having Riser be forced to bottle up his emotions again(like the audience is again gorced to) and amuse Ophis after she tried to kill him. You gave is another hint of catharsis when Riser beat Wukong but again you ripped out any sense of triumph when immediately after you had him be basically teased and laughed at by Kuroka for an entire condrontation before she just leaves without any repercussion. Next chapter and you have the Satans basically pinching his cheeks and manipulating him around without a care and of course Kuroka has joined just to tease the shit out of him. Uhhhhh. Seriously, I do like this story, and I get that you want to keep the concept of there always being a stronger fighter out there and that Riser has a long way to go but as a reader it just builds frustration to see basically stagnation and bondage be in the forseeable future. I know Riser isn't actually stagnant but he just seems to be moving more and more into 'Pawn' territory with every chapter he is in. His interaction with the Maou is probably the most frustrating. From the way you have him interact I think maybe you want the banter to be teasing? But every time they talk Serafall and Sirzechs dance circles around Riser and have him doing whatever they want and Riser takes it with grit teeth and this has added on with Ophis now being even more smug and condescending. I know you can't have Riser curbstomp his opposition but as a reader(especially with the first person narration you've chosen) it is exhausting and frustrating to see the POV character we are following being pulled around like a dog on a leash by basically everyone with no end in sight. Ophis basically said "amuse me" after she tried to kill Riser and Riser had no choice but to do so and it is just so freaking INFURIATING to have this topped on by Kuroka laughing at him while threatening his family, Serafall laughing about him while telling him she threatened his family, Sirzechs basically telling him what to do every other chapter. It would be better if you had the interactions framed as teasing or something but all the characters generally seem to percieve Riser as a non-issue servant. Even when Serafall is being burned she is actually laughing as she still regards him as a easily manipulated child. This rant/review has gone for longer than I though it would sorry about that. But I'm hoping you take note and maybe not have Riser(and the readers) feel so frustrated and powerless. |
![]() ![]() I don't have an account so I can't vote on your poll but in my experience a rewrite leads to burnout for the author as well as frustration for the reader. It should only be done when the story is already finished. Until then I think it's the best idea to just countinue with the story even if the writing of the earlier chapters isn't up to your standard any longer. Sincerely, PortalGun |
![]() ![]() Riser Phenex : 1000 times as powerful Just as much of a spineless bitch. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm fairly annoyed that you consider this story trash, sure it's a reincarnation/SI but it's still one of the best DxD fics on the site. |
![]() ![]() ![]() in rereading this chapter I have to say it's definitely your best, I love the mix of power and political intrigue, also Riser should definitely bang that cat |
![]() ![]() ![]() Im so confused at whats happening xD |
![]() ![]() ![]() Best storia |
![]() ![]() Good Chapter! |
![]() ![]() How dare you deride this, my favorite fanfiction. No, nostalgia is not biasing me. I'm still vaguely reminiscent with what happened in this story, and I know I liked it. So, please do post some more chapters. |
![]() ![]() ![]() No Ravel, huh? Unfortunate! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Like the many that preceded me continue the with your current writing style as i much rather have to read this with a lots of chapters than a rewrite that you may lost interest before the new stuff cones up after all its good the worldbuilding has been good enough the story as of now is finally on 2?/3? season and really just want your riser to finally have a super devil(satan) Form e.i aura of destruction kankura formula and etc. Either i hope that the update is goona be soon and will be waiting. Your humble reader, -Riatsu |
![]() ![]() ![]() My dude I want to see more of super fire sword and whatever ritual he preformed as well as a jump in power next chapter because rivezim is a super devil he needs them buffs. |