Is he set on marrying Rias or something? She just doesn't seem worth all the trouble if I'm being honest. Personally, I would have tried to get the engagement annulled, and just forget about her.

lol the dude under me is some new type of stupid

This is a fucking DXD fanfic so why the fuck are you not making a harem. A DXD fic is only DXD when there is a harem so if you don't want to make a harem then don't fucking do a DXD fic

Please never write again before you learn where rambling and monologueing begin and end. Especially in the boring and droning way you do it

I enjoyed the story despite at some points it felt like all of the monologuing felt a bit extra and unnecessary.

fucking genius, i am reading it for the second time.

It's gotten somewhat better in this chapter, but that might be because more things are happening and the discussion is somewhat flowing.

It feels more natural and less like masturbatory word smithing for the sake of it

I am sorry for saying it and I am not trying to rain on your parade.

You are a phenomenal writer and your ideas are quite interesting.

But it's just not fun to read.

Too much detail, too many unnecessary tangents, so many paragraphs of needless information.

You can skip seven paragraphs in a row and still find the conversation at the same point.

It's fine as a plot device once every now and then, but when it's literally all interactions all the time, it's just exhausting.

I will keep reading everything as the premise is absolutely great.

But fuck me how long winded and boring the execution is.

Your story has the same weakness as mine where the main character monologues too much and in a boring way.

Usually I try to get over it by making shorter sentences as the longer the sentence, the more it feels like rambling.

Authors who change the gender of creatures like the Red Dragon Emperor and the 9 Tails Fox from Naruto make me sick.
It’s the pinnacle of gender swaps. It’s so completely unnecessary. It added nothing to this story.

All these characters being wildly OOC ruins the fun. From Serafell Leviathan to Kokabiel, almost everyone is different. And it does a disservice to the story.

"Onii-sama, Okaa-sama seems to have stopped functioning but she's burning up. Otou-sama is trying to calm her down but you better explain what you just said before she goes nuclear."

I cringe so hard when I read this in fics. It becomes a point where English fics stop making sense when there’s so much Japanese sprinkled throughout the fics.
I wish authors would stop flexing their limited Japanese vocabulary.
We don’t need to know the Japanese word for brother or which honorific would be used when they’re older, etc.
just use “brother”, “mother”, etc. We don’t want anything else. Please.

“Newsflash, I wasn't a baby, but a fully grown man.
A peerage I know very little about even if I have some knowledge of this topsyturvy universe.“

I’ve never understood transmigration fics where you don’t acquire the new body’s memories. Memories are chemically encoded in the brain. So are you telling me everything got erased and rewritten with his past self’s memories? That’s so dumb.

nice

wow 2 horrible chapters. what absolute garbage. i touch girls for some experiment. so instead of a pervert your a crazy freak who experiments on people... ppl would def like that more. dipshit