I gotta say that this story is getting pretty damn boring.

Harry is in a house that pumps out dark wizards on a conveyor belt (if you go by canon) yet no one in the house apart from Malfoy is giving him any pushback whatsoever. Harry should have been getting wedgies and swirlies as soon as he set foot in the Slytherin common room for his blood status, his family's affiliation with Dumbles, and his ratty hand-me-down clothing.

You expect me to believe that in a school house that's well known for espousing blood purist beliefs the students in said house would not only accept a filthy half-blood who was indirectly the cause of many of their relatives' misfortune but actually follow his rules about being 'nicer to others' and not saying the word mudblood... Give me a break.

Then you have the Carrow twins, who are from a notoriously dark family yet act more vanilla than canon Hermione and have little to no personality at all. What is the appeal, they don't even have the sexy dark witch vibe going for them.

Worse still, Harry’s main adversary from canon was turned into a nonentity when Dumbles took care of his horcruxes and ghosted him out of the story. Harry didn't face Voldemort a single time since coming to Hogwarts and it makes me wonder what the point of this story is.

I'm guessing the only real conflict in this story will be Crouch and Wormtail which doesn't exactly fill me with anticipation about the 94-95 school year. He'll probably get entered into the tournament just like in canon, and Harry will have to juggle training for the tournament while prepping for his O.W. Ls, and it will ultimately end with someone else taking care of Crouch and the Rat before the third task.

I'll hang around a bit longer but I do not hold much hope of this story getting any better.

Thanks for writing this. It's quite interesting. There are a few tense mix-ups that keep throwing me off a bit, though (has vs. had etc).

I'm amused by the wording of Harry's oath to Dumbledore here in Chapter 19. Have you deliberately worded this to imply that it actually only covers agreements etc that impact the duration of the Yule party? (otherwise I would have expected the words "during the Yule party of 1991" to have been placed before the words "...that will anyway affect" if the intent was for the vow to be about agreements that occurred at the event!

Harry is living a videogame lol

Nice descriptions of all the hazards.

Harry the pussy strikes again. He is a parselmouth, is he not? He can cast the serpinsortia spell, can he not? So why did he resort to hiding behind tables and throwing first-year spells at his attackers? If you were going for your M.C being a useless little bitch then you've nailed it. Harry was sent to Hogwarts a year early, which means he must be as magically mature as someone a year older, but I don't think this 'fourth-year' could win in a fight with his canon third-year counterpart.

This story would be sooooooooo much better if Harry didn't act like a spineless bitch around Dumbledore.

I think Harry is already nutless, Dumbledore has nothing to fear from Harry attending the party.

Harry sure showed Malfoy who's boss, nothing like a good lecture to really get his point across. I mean it's not like Harry has this magical stick that could cause Malfoy's lips to be glued together or turned into a ferret or something like that. Please god have Harry brew a testicle growth potion or a spine stiffening elixir before the next chapter. In the last few chapters Harry’s interactions with Ron and Malfoy have him coming across as a great big dripping vagina and it is offputting to say the least.

Great second Task.

Snape was a hundred percent right, Harry acted like a bitch.

The key challenge was pretty interesting, and the tablets being the object to retrieve was a nice twist. Harry getting second place was good. Now I have the anticipation of how the third task will play out and what it’ll be. Great chapter, keep up the hard work!

story is great simply because your not using all the same events from the books/movie's you change things up.
unlike most harry potter fanfic writers who use the events from the movie/books as a crutch so they don't have to come up with idea's of there own.

Maybe Harry should have been brewing a potion to grow a set of testicles so he'd have the balls to tell Dumbledore to go fuck himself

Alright, Harry's constant stuttering is getting old at this point.

I really like this story. It's an excellent read and I look forward to reading what happens in your next chapter.

A very creative take on the 2nd task, I loved the Key of Wind. Can't wait for more of this and Power of Eclipse!