Auh... shit.

Damn. Just... damn. She should have been dead. Given the relations between Jack and Hermione were consensual and he was killed. She raped Harry while he had no way of agreeing, and commited line-theft by baring his child... She should be dead.

Hahahahaha! I knew that battle was still going to happen. Harry's survived too many things with his power to not expect Anubis to do the same.

I appreciate how you handled this. It was really abrupt and a bit jarring for that. But, I love the realism to it.

What, the, hell? Gods forsaken child! She has the communication device to speak directly to Luna. Why wouldn't she just... talk to them about seeing her brother? Gaah!

And this, firmly displays the truth... there is no winner in war.

I was curious how they were going to teach english at the scale that was going to be necessary after losing their best teachers back to Earth. Nice.

You do really well with giving a strong closing line to your chapters, hooking but not leaving readers hanging from a cliff.

I really like how you handled this chapter. I was worried that there was going to be issues between Harry and Luna over their leaving the empire.

This part actually gave me chills.
Of course. "Go, then, I'll be along shortly!"
If the Akai'kheb was sending his own people in, then he had no intention of destroying the whole temple. Aldal ran back to the line where his troops waited.
"Protectors! The Akai'kheb calls on you to save our children! Form up by squads and follow me!"
More amazing, not a single one of his men hesitated. In fact, many had already broken formation when they heard Tel'gat shout back what her orders were.

That's how it's done!

Damn. I... have nothing else to say about this chapter. Just, damn.

That was fun. Hermione doing her "shoot and die", then telling them their god is being judged. Fantastic.

That training scene was good. Well written too. I only realized it was a training situation just before the "code black" was called. And I love the ending of this chapter. Just, fantastic.

The second half of this chapter seemed really really familiar. I feel like I've read an almost identical handful of scenes before somewhere. Very cool all the same.