I am amazed after reading this story and my favorite part is this, I shrug. Okay. But, I'm going to use it as blackmail. Shikamaru plops back down on the ground and replies in a monotone voice, I'm so scared. I playfully roll my eyes and walk over to Asuma. I would apologize for intruding, but it looks like you guys are not busy at the moment. So, I have a small request. For your information, we have done plenty today, Asuma mildly protests. But, what do you want? I tell him my request and he ponders for a moment. Hmmm, I'm not sure. Let me see what I can do and come by here tomorrow around one and I will give you an answer then. I nod my head. At least he didn't say no. Thank you! No problem, Asuma says. If I do find someone, which I am not making any promises, are you going to be able to handle the pressure of training between two instructors for a month straight? All day, everyday? I narrow my eyes. Are you trying to discourage me? Asuma shrugs. I just don't want you to overdo yourself. I know you can handle it physically, but what about mentally? I don't want stress and pressure getting to you and you have a breakdown. Okay, I think he's implying about my father. I have told Asuma enough about my training days with my father to know that he's worried about me spending a whole month straight doing nothing but training with the strict man. Can I do it? Yes, I think I can. Am I going to be stressed and frustrated at times? Of course. That is normal. But, I am not going to give up just because I make a mistake or I am tired of my father giving me corrections. I am going to improve and get stronger. I am going to show Neji, my father, and everybody in my clan that I am strong enough to be their leader one day and not in the ways they expect me to be. I am going to show Orochimaru and his minions how serious I am about him not taking Sasuke away from us. I dare the serpent to lay one finger on him. Okay… maybe I wouldn't do that. I'm not ready enough to dare Orochimaru to do anything yet. I give Asuma a reassuring smile. Thank your for your concern, but I will be alright. Asuma smirks. Alrighty, kiddo. If you say so. Like I said, just swing by the tomorrow and I will let you know something. I nod. "If you find someone, I will be happy and honored with whoever it is. And I really love these three characters (Hinata),(Neji)&(Naruto) and there role in story is amazing and I am wondering to draw these two for you and if you are interested so here's my,,,
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Will you ever come back to this?

Obviously sasuke is giving hinata his condolences so that the possible sasuhina can start somewhere, never mind the fact that sasuke finding out was never explained. Honestly, you ain’t slick.

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I'm sorry to hear about your hardships. I hope as I'm writing this you are feeling better. This story is really amazing and I loved the writing. I hope I'll see more even if its not this story specifically as your writing and story is very good!

This story's MC-chan is dumber than a rock. She's gone too native, coupled with some fix-it syndrome.. while she's not a disaster, it's still pretty bad.

Dude... A sick Hinata? wtf? There is nowhere to prove this idea of your author...

Her abilities are inconsistent . At one moment she is super then another she's weaker than sakura. Also it seems like ur making other people tell how strong or talented she is without any proper action to show it.

It's extremely sad how common it is for good stories to end Suddenly, I to hope you eventually finish it and I shall bookmark it just incase.

...do...do you have any idea...any idea at all...how easy it would've been to Gentle fist in in the spine when thet switched with the kunai?

Like I understand this fight is supposed to be Sakura's moment to shine and all but...it's not at all practical cause they had her Dead to rights she definitely wasn't expecting the bootleg flying raijin.

The positice definitely out way the negatives but still, I don't get why you chose to not make her as strong as she should be.

First with a nameless desease/condition, that you use to justify why she is not as physically strong as could have been.

Then with a sprained wrist that should have healed in the 3 day period, because she is not a normal person...
(It's been stated on multiple occasions that shinobi heal faster than normal civilian because of their chakra).

Lastly (The thing that lowered my opinion of the story)
She knows about future events and how OP rhe shippuden antagonists are but hasn't planned out a simple training regiment to increase her chakra reserves (stamina), and has only just decided to take advantage of shadow clones.

The thing that bordered me most about this chapter is the fact that she shouldn't have been able to shake off the Air palms because it has been shown taking down Jonin level people with just 1 hit.
And speaking of Air palms, the air palms only became available to branch family members after the 2half year time skip from OG Naruto to Shippuden.
Which makes me wonder why you (Author-Sama) have chosen to right a Hyuga centric story but without first making sure that you have near perfect understanding of both the Gentle Fist and the Hyuga clan.

Honestly I'm disappointed with Hinata's lack of strength...

OC Hinata is supposedly better than OG Hinata but soo far your Hinata is really underwhelming.

I like that you shuffled the teams but I have to admit that your team build doesn't make sense.

Team 10 is supposed to be a super effective matchup and it doesn't make sense why you changed them.

I can understand why you would want to mix up team Kakashi and team Kurenai but there was no real reason to mess with the InoShikaCho.

I will be forever waiting for more

comment to your disclaimer for chapter 8. I AGREE! Love a spicy Shino fic!

Team 7 doesn’t make sense. While skill sets are good to base teams off you would think they would base it off personality too. I mean I can understand that Chunin may not face the same issue but Genin are very much still immature and learning how to be “Shonobi.” Also I’m unsure how Ino really fits with Naruto & Sasuke. Info’s clan techniques are more suited for capture or interrogation. Hell they don’t have a Nara that can control her body why she’s unconscious.

Sakura would have been a better fit for Team 7 or 8. I honestly thought she’d be on Team 8 because Team 8 has a Sensai who specializes in Genjutsu.