Look... Genderbending is fine... when your reader knows what they're getting into. I don't mind gay relationships and stuff, but making the MC male, even in your summary, just to change him into a girl without warning? That's not cool.

Was a good story I personally think you should continue it

That was amazing! I loved the romantic parts, and pls keep writing stories based on this - I totally love it!

Reasons why this story annoyed tf out of me and why I felt I had to abandoned it.

1. It's annoying enough when an author breaks the flow of a story to beg for reviews/favorites at the start of every chapter, but you did it at the start and the end of every chapter, along with your beta AND your second beta.

2. For some reason, you felt you had to emasculate Percy by having Artemis turn him into a girl, multiple times too, so that everyone, including his friends and the hunters, could laugh at him, all the while Artemis is thinking in the background that if there was any male deserving of her respect, it'd be Percy...What? if you thought it'd be funny, let alone make any sense. it wasn't and it didn't.

3. Using curse of Achilles for shock valuethere is no background or a good reason why it'd just carry over to another timeline in another body of PJ, when it is so difficult to get it in the first place... but, sure, I'll bite.

4. Then you had him lose the curse of Achilles just a couple of chapters later in one of the most prominent battles, which he'd been preparing for this whole time, and you made a whole thing about him turning into a girl, in the name of training, of course, only for him to be disabled almost soon as the battle starts so that Thalia, Zoe and Athena can swoop in and save the day. What was the point of all that training? so that he could be turned into a girl? .. WHAT?

5. Last but not the least, Zoe, who's been alive for 3 millenia, HATES tf out of all men, from the get go with NO background as to why or a good reason, falls in love with Percy, again, FROM chalter 1... really? how does that even make sense? There is no context except the canon where she is dying and being turned into a constellation by Artemis.

it was a great concept, okay writing, but, bad BAD characterization and plotting. Pacing could also use some work.

As i think deeper on it, Artemis is unnervingly close to a child groomer. I mean, pressuring children to join her with goodies, and not really giving them an out? I mean, whos gonna say no to a goddess that admitted a few seconds earlier she turned someone into an animal for simply finding them?

I have not had such a large reaction to anything I've read as I had to the end of this chapter. I am speechless.

Well said

I feel like this Percy is too smart, by that I mean, who the hell remembera their exact words from several years back?. I sure as hell don't think Percy would

Left ring finger? He just got engaged to Hades I think.

He has the curse of achilles... he defeated Hades entire army and held him at sword point. A big three. He faught titans. Artemis is weak sauce that couldnt do shit to atlas.

That part when Percy yelled at Nico and bianca to run and then they run is wrong, because of human instinct. See, why would they run when a complete stranger brandishing a sword and shield attacking their vice principal with the intent of killing? The natural instincts is for them to stay rooted there confused and shock when two stranger teen showed up with a sword shield and a spear that spew lightning and started attacking their vice principal.

Oh, nevermind, just a dream. But you still didn't need to copy the book like that. There were better ways to do it.

The story got incredibly lazy this chapter. Practically the same as the book. There are some things in it that literally should have changed given the premis of the story, but you didn't.

I really enjoy this story. It is a gem amidst the usual AU stories. I feel the Percy Jackson universe is just incomplete without magic, so I was so glad to see this story. My only critique is to please keep the author and beta notes to the beginning and end of chapters. The notes in the middle paragraphs really take the reader out of the universe.

People reading this who have a problem with the gay relationship go fuck yourself and do the world a favor and die. I probably should write this but I am fucking tired of you homophobic assholes. Give me a good reason why you hate gay/lesbian people and don't give me that God bullcrap. If God made people to be straight all I have to say is fuck God.