Perfect revenge. Though Harry laid it on thick as should any good smartarse. Man, the girls sure plan fast and well

So close

Great descriptions of the Alley. It makes the story more real

Love how well the kids interact. The friendship is real and the rest will work itself out

Love the opening. Luna is so more sensible than most folks. Yes, I said it.

This is my absolute favorite ship. All three of them need each other. But it only works as a triad. Then they must have Neville, the elves, and the uncles nearby.

Thank you for marching through stuff. Less experienced authors might give us three or four chapters ofHarry angst. Action Harry is preferable, even with mistakes

Good soo far, but you need to be more descriptive with what person is speaking.

You don’t know the difference between ‘babies’ and ‘baby’s’. This theme continues throughout. Learn how to differentiate between the plural and the possessive. Buy yourself a guide to the apostrophe, because you clearly have no idea how one is properly used. Her name is Dolores Umbridge. The nurse is Pomfrey. Proper nouns need to be capitalized. Commas are for breaks or asides within a sentence. Your imagination is great, your grammar is severely lacking. Could be an excellent story if you had better proofreading.

Love the story and on at least my third read through but during the trial in ch. 26 you call umbridge Doris instead of Delores

Funny and not! A good story. Will look for the sequel! Looks like none!

Since you mentioned it... On not in, Her not he, he not the. Yes, the song is true and spellcheck sucks for slang and grammar!

ok missed the potion part from last chapter but i still say there retarded for not checking there drinks for potions.

right of course dumbles pulls that but the fact the other's agreed to do it proves everyone of them should be firedand that there all dumbles retarded yes men

how is snape still alive if a blood feud was declared he should have been killed not kicked from his job

less points for not challaging the dragon is a crock of shit the whole point off the task was to get the egg not fight the dragon

funny seemed to me even in the books and movie's harry was not a trouble maker he was just doing the teachers jobs for them because they could not be bothered to do them them selves

funny could have sworn it was harry who interrupted a private chat not the other way around

Ok...I had to skip through this chapter. Just getting too. Weird. Basically total nonsense filler, boosting word count with no contribution to story. Similar, very similar to the random girly Slytherin and poor Ron's pointless ramblings.