|Reviews for Disappearance|
| kitcat19us chapter 1 . 6/26/2009
| Singing Violin chapter 1 . 12/23/2007
This is very cute, though it ends somewhat abruptly (it'd be nice if they had some part in their capture).
Also, in places your wording could use work. For example, "she was lying on the metallic floor of what looked like a giant metal box" is redundant; you should remove one of "metal" and "metallic." Another example is "before leaning in, as if to kiss her...before kissing her again." If he kissed her the first time, then it wasn't "as if to kiss her," it was just "to kiss her."
Also, for some reason there are periods speckled throughout the story where they don't belong. That may be an artifact of some sort of conversion, but it's distracting and pretty easy to fix.
| sailorsw chapter 1 . 12/22/2007
| addrianna818 chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
Interesting story. I like it. Great job.
| Hestia01 chapter 1 . 1/31/2003
Looks good, you've gotten me interested. :-) You might want to find a thesaurus, though, you kind of overkilled on the word "exotic". Your dialouge is right-on, I look forward to more
| dancing-badly chapter 1 . 1/30/2003
Great so far. I look forward to seeing what else you will write.
I think that in times like this. Chakotay would call her Katheryn and not Captain.
Write more soon.