Reviews for Take A Stand |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Oh. Well this was intense. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well this ought to be good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh boy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! Great action scene! So exited to see what you have for the squeal! I really wish I had read this earlier but hey, I read it! |
![]() ![]() I could not stop reading this fan fiction you wrote. I loved every moment of reading it, read it in two days and it is very well written. Character development was done impeccably and the mix of drama, violence, sex and good times is blended so well it puts moder soap operas to shame. You are a very talented author and writer, please keep up the great work |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh dear. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my, Marian savage. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my, plot. |
![]() ![]() So aside from some missing words, the story flows like a river all calm and slow and I mean that in a good way. Overall the continued character development is very on point and you really paint such a vivid picture. |
![]() ![]() So even though this is fan fiction, it seems like something that would come out of the minds of the creators who made Zooptopia. Great job with the initial character development, storyline flows very smooth, and the drama really enhances the overall story. Ending was funny and I am looking forward to more! |
![]() ![]() Oh my goodness... that is all I can say! Seriously you made me cry for so many time, the end made me cry, laugh and happy! You sir are an very good writer! Please say there is more coming in that universe? That can't be the end! It's way to beautiful! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice story. Predictable, boring and inconsistent at several perts but the artwork that comes out from it is nice. If your next story has as many artworks as this one had then I might check it out but as for reviews, I don't see the worth in reviewing works where the writer doesn't contact the reader. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So I just read Take a Stand in it;s entirety. Honestly for the most part I can't fault it. Sure a few typos aside but every bugger does that. I think the biggest strength is the character interactions, pretty much every character was well thought out, felt like an individual, had their own "voice." By that I mean they were given exactly enough of a personality so I could give them their own voice in my head. A significant chunk of writers seem to make every character sound exactly the same, use the same language, the same speech pattern, making every one too verbose so they don't talk like real people. Here? Not a problem Except for one guy. Little John. I dunno, you make the whole thing about the M.M gang about how good this team of three work but Little John always felt like he got the (arrow) shaft. He's just kinda...there. I suppsoe when 99% of your characters are well written including guys who are only in for paragraphs, something had to give. But it felt like he was supposed to be a main supporting character. Like his big scene really was his fight with Nick that seemed to last barely longer than a page. You really get emotions down pat in a scene, probably as you;ve already been told a billion times before, the scene where Vic dies? Amazing. Nick's reaction to his father and mother's revelation? Brilliant. I also really liked your take on Jack Savage, nice to see him being used as something other than a plot device to for Nick to be jealous. I will say I Some (not all) found the action scenes somewhat lacking in comparison to your character interactions. It's hard to write a good action scene that flows well, but I felt I should mention it since they do form a decent chunk of it. I will say though I found the way the story ended kind of...off. You have this great final confrontation and it stops exactly where it needs to...then the epilogue comes and it feels like the story just stopped, rather than ended naturally. It feels like we get far too little closure on a lot of stuff. No mention of Bogo and Clawhauser, a sentence or two on the mayor. Bugger all knowledge of what exactly happened to Bagheera and the rest of the corrupt officers. No mentioned of the 33rd being taken to task. I dunno it just felt that a lot of little, possible inconsequential stuff was kinda just dropped. Could have used another chapter of accounts being settled possibly? Other than that definitely in my top three zootopia fics. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yaay happy ending, im so happy for everyone |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yaaaay happy ending, im so happy for everyone |