|Reviews for Fallen God|
| tweryt8669 chapter 5 . 4/12
really like this
| Light Fan chapter 5 . 3/2/2019
Why has there not been an update in over a year. I am dying. I need to finish this story, how much longer do we have to wait. Please update. I love this story but Wammy University is my fav.
| asdfghjkl chapter 5 . 7/26/2018
i know it's been a year and a half but please continue this i need to see light suffer
| obsessed chapter 5 . 6/18/2018
I'm actually serious. You need to upload heofre I die. I don't mean to sound rude in any way but the last time you uploaded so January 2017. PLEASE I check everyday to see if chapter 6 is out yet you don't understand the absolute struggles I love you writing and stories and I need this stormy you don't even know how much I need to read the other chapter please upload as you as you can.
Btw going back to wammy university chapter 13. Yes it was rape but I feel like people were hating on you and the chapter too much. I loved that chapter when I read it cuz I knew light would be angry but eventually forgive his one and only true love L .
Another thing is that I feel like in your stories you could make l gush over Light more. I mean he is something else and to be honest way too good for l on all standards. I know L isn't ugly tho I don't think he is attractive so gr8 l to see light I feel like l should feel some type of way .
| Une.Autrice.Qui.A.Demenager chapter 5 . 12/7/2017
My dear, SlightlyPsycho, you are a real pervert, just like me. however, I am not as professional as you are in writing rape scenes. But fuck... I wish so much that Light is raped by L. I want L to fuck him very hard and Light's asshole bleeding blood.
At this time, if you update before January 2018, I would like to tell you how much I really love your release in your story and also that I'm translate your history Wammy University in my language.
I do not really care what happens to Light, I just hope he's going to be raped a lot by men. I want Light to suffer as much as we (fan of Lawliet) have suffered. Ignored the reviews that criticize you badly, you are an incredible author and everyone expects the following. For my part, I'm not in a hurry.
I am currently working on Wammy University and as soon as you have finished bleeding me with this other story, I promise you that I will make maximum efforts to translate it. No matter how much there is chapter, I will tear my hair to do it, unless a French author like me takes the lead.
Good luck for the next chapter, O great goddess of perversion. And especially passed a happy new year 2018.
| Marzannar chapter 5 . 12/2/2017
I'm not sure if I should review but as I personally would have liked to get a review, I'll repeat the gesture in hopes that you'd like one as well.
While the plot behind this story is nice and I like the idea that L gains some ground, the execution is about average. The grammar has some mistakes and the prose, if you want to call it that, is terribly boring. It's rather like reading a list of your groceries with some repetition and changed sentence structure and words thrown in. Lots of paraphrasing, in other words, that doesn't really lift the mood. The anal search should have been done with gloves, especially since L should be aware of rectum bacteria and the fact that he eats with his hands. It would have still been embarrassing for Light and latex gloves can work like "finger condom". I assume you wanted L to embarrass Light with this scene and the camera since part of me wants to believe L would have found the evidence through other means as well. I liked the fingering scene, I really like dubcon and all that. But it felt like a poorly executed scene as a whole. The ensuing fight was also nice.
The biggest problem is your lack of colorful prose and character introspection - describing weather and walls won't cut it. You could fix a lot of things with that. Dostojevski does this beautifully in my opinion, or you could also try George R. R. Martin with his 'A song of ice and fire' series. Martin's prose is a bit more quick paced if you like that sort of thing. Gillian Flynn is also alright as an author. The goal is to get characters' feeling across without having to state "Light was having an erection". I'd have liked to get more insight to his mind but you can also move the story forward like this. Mastering the art of inspecting prose that handles different scenes in your preferred paragraph amount is a good skill to have and if you're serious about fanfiction, you should try learning it. If you're a teenager, don't worry. Getting writing experience usually pays off when you yourself have opinions of the world and can get into certain characters' heads. I polished that skill when I was 21 though all my stories here are old so you won't see it in them. The thing is, L is 25 and if you're below that age or have never interacted with people that old then you're going to have more difficulties than someone like me who has that experience. But rushing things at some points killed part of the inverse integration for me.
Also, if I'm correct then this story has two protagonists - L and Light. I feel like there's some unbalance in your way of handling them or then the prose got in the way again. Nevertheless, Light didn't feel 100% Light and L felt only slightly like himself. I like that you made L care for Light, I really do. But the interactions remain unpolished in my eyes. Like I said, fix the prose, pacing and character introspection and I think this story will be famous.
Forgive me but I didn't look at the posting year and as I'm reviewing on phone, I can't see it. If you find this critique unreasonable then just ignore it. But don't shut your eyes and just say you're not Ohba so you can't do it. You can, in your own way.
Have a good evening and I hope this didn't drag your writing spirit down.
| Guest chapter 5 . 11/25/2017
I want to read its
| Death Files chapter 1 . 11/7/2017
Hello, I know I have already reviewed this story, but I just wanted you to know that you're my favorite Death Note writer, your stories are the most deep and intense, and I am really looking forward to read more from you. I hope you didn't give up on that story because that would be a shame, it seemed so promising... You have a lot of fans (like me) who want to know what is going to happen, so please, just don't give up on it and update as soon as possible!
| yogurtstrawberrycheesecake chapter 5 . 9/27/2017
Rereading this story and falling in love with it again. You really do write most wonderful stories. Please don't abandon it. T_T
| Guest chapter 5 . 9/4/2017
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/3/2017
Omg... I need this. Please update chapter 6...
You need to update like 10 chapter a in one day to make up for lost time. This is my oxygen I can't live without it. PLEASE SAVE ME.
| yours chapter 5 . 4/25/2017
Update please,, I miss u :(
| Gmask chapter 5 . 4/15/2017
I can't wait for the next chapter!XD Ha Ha Light's reactions to L are the best!
| Mayo GirL chapter 5 . 4/9/2017
You are the best, master of making LxLight story. Seriuosly, I love all of your story and the way you make them in your fics is just perfect. Please update asap x( oh its ok, take ur time, I know to make such good story need time. Just dont hung us up, keep update _
| chuixue07 chapter 4 . 3/15/2017
When Light hurt himself twice, I could nearly depict Light in my mind as pathetic,delicate and surely, somehow charming XD
I like that two plots.…
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