Reviews for A New Life
Psionic108 chapter 1 . 5/31/2021
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Psionic108 chapter 1 . 5/31/2021
Nicely written, liking the concept.

some points of criticism (and my personal opinions?For some reason, writing in Naruto POV section felt jarring, like robotic(cocky robotic if that even exists :p) That along with the info-dumpish way he mentions how he has access to all the jutsus the sharingan has copied is kind of on the nose. IMO, you could've had
Naruto do all those things and then have explained how he did those in following chapter( so you'd have more time to explore and expand upon the impacts of that fact rather than having to explain it away in one line, I feel the former would've added more to the story of Mario's past)

Others POV and non-pov writing flew better and was nicely done.

keep up the good work
Guest chapter 28 . 5/31/2021
Damn good fight and chapter
Shadow chapter 28 . 5/31/2021
Awesome chapter, absolutely loved it!
ChangeMe4574 chapter 28 . 5/31/2021
Yooo, that fight was dope
simm36 chapter 28 . 5/31/2021
buen capitulo
Umbra.Venator chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
Good fight scene, well done on finishing it especially if it was hard to write
Rio Skyron chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
I symathize with you lol, I remember that fight scene I wrote in The Dragonborn Returns Team SVGD (which you might have read i don't recall) that took me 6 months to write. 6 MONTHS!
7hanatos chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
Oh is that Kurama or Gaia?
Ferdiad chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
Fight was enjoyable, have to say you dont see Naruto setting of nukes that often that don't involve tailed beast bombs.
FateBurn chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
nice
brachiosaurus chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
yo! massive thanks for the update, hopefully you had a good irl life, and see you soon in the next installment!
Phazer12 chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
Thanks for the chapter.
Zeak106 chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
I think you forgot to put speech quotes on most of the dialog this chapter. makes it difficult to read
The Ethereal Lord chapter 28 . 5/30/2021
So Sorry for the punctuation problem. I've gone through it again and corrected as many as i could find.
If you spot any errors, please let me know. I thank you all for your reviews!
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