Reviews for A New Life |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter, looking forward to the next |
![]() ![]() I checked this not 5 seconds prior to this post, with this thought in mind. "I wonder if the story is updated" I suddenly realize how much I look forward to your work. thank you very much for that. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loving the story so far! Your flow and writing style are exceptional. I like how you handle the characters and the dialogue. Additionally, the scene switches are easy to relate as to who is talking and not so frequent that it gets annoying. A lot of writers mess this up. Again, great work and I am definitely looking forward to reading more. On a side note, you never mentioned if Kaguya has her third eye still. You had said Naruto has Sasuke's RinneSharingan, however, it was never clearly stated if she lost it or not. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have absolutely no idea WTF is going on |
![]() ![]() ![]() please update sooner |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is an interesting story so far. I like how it is going, and the pacing seems to be, for the most part, on point. However, it is a bit jarring with the transitions between third- and first-person, especially with no notice as to whose perspective it is. So it would be great if you could put something up to that effect please, that would be great. That being my only large complaint, beyond having your personal timeline being a bit confusing, though I am sure that will change as we get further into the story, I am very much enjoying it so far, and I look forward to seeing how your story goes. One more thing, was the name Holly Short a reference to the Artemis Fowl book series? If so, awesome. If not, still awesome, as that is the name of one of my favorite characters ever. |
![]() ![]() All this pov switching... can we NOT? Just keep it 3rd person? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really like the dynamic between Naruto and Kaguya, and you showing how politically savvy Kaguya is. Also like this mature version of Naruto, too many fan fiction depict him as naive fool post war, like he's still 13. Going through a war like he went through would definitely change your mindset and how you act. Glad you showed that. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So it's NarutoxKaguya I am ok with this that pairing is rare. Usually it's NaruHina for some reason like Naruto seals her inside him randomly. Or she just happens to be with Naruto when he's Kamui'd to another dimension. Too many weird reasons for a pairing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please make this in the 3rd person speach because these POV make me wanna stop reading this storie. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooh, nice! Good concept, excellent execution! Here you go, sir, have a Favorite! Proper grammar and vocabulary. You've no idea how uncommon they actually are in stories these days... |
![]() ![]() Do you post at set times or is it kinda random? |
![]() ![]() I hope it wont be a Kaguya/Naruto that's creepy and disgusting as Naruto is her genitical descendant and the reincarnation of her grandson. |