Reviews for A New Life |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome story so far :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Seems pretty good so far here |
![]() ![]() ![]() Could be interesting if done well |
![]() ![]() something vague that can be stated inside of a sentence and be completely overlooked, I think that's why they only ever mentioned the team as "the Team." That or severe lack of imagination. Probably the latter. back to my original point, having it made so makes it easier to leave/make cues for an action or location. It IS supposed to be a black-ops group after all. Having a name like Magistrate, is a nice play on the whole "Justice" aspect, But kind of, just KIND OF draws un-needed attention. I say change the name according to the mission, makes it harder to track down an individual or group if they don't actually bear a name, technically they don't exist. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A few little things. I love naruto and everything but that doesn't mean that I have learned enough of the japanese language to know what jutsu they are using. Can you write the english equivalent into the story as well. It flows better when you know what the jutsu. It's great that you described it and everything but keeping the imagination of how you see it for yourself just seems better at least to me. Hehe Kaguyas bodygaurd is her reincarnated grandson that's somehow older than her. Trippy right? Oh also why not give the team a name from the narutoverse like Akastuki or kage or konoha or Akastuki or Justice Society or Akastuki or Root or ANBU or Akatsuki. Or The Grey. |
![]() ![]() Honor Guard |
![]() ![]() So is Naruto, joining the team or not? Because honest.y I'm starting to think its a hit of a cliche. |
![]() ![]() God I hate these POV's, fuggin wish it was all written in third person like abnormal story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like how you didn't just have them become heroes great fanfiction so far keep up the good work |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter, and is good to see that Kaguya is still dealing with what happened to her and wont just magically be alright, while also getting everythings shell be able to squiss out from Batman for their help in this Team of his, also like how you are making your own version of the team and its members. As for pairing if you do one hope its Naruto and Kaguya together, though I also woudnt mind Artemis. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting start. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yep, fuck this story. -_- |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not to be 'That Guy', but Naruto's speed is FTL. This was proven when he dodged Madara's Sage Art: Storm Release Light Fang which is said to be hard to dodge as it runs at the speed of light POINT BLANK. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good stuff |
![]() ![]() ![]() You got a bit of Kaguya's backstory wrong, but otherwise, great chapter. |