|Reviews for The Catalyst For Revenge|
| Neroscurse chapter 154 . 12/5
Another masterful chapter. Really enjoyed reading what happened from Philip's perspective. Nice job bringing that back around some 100 chapters later. I know some Hollywood writers that could take lessons from you and your crew.
| Neroscurse chapter 153 . 12/5
Damn, 8 chapters from the end, i've thought i've seen it all. But that storyline about the changing of the name, very well done. Made my laugh my ass off. Probably because i work for the government and yeah, we're that bad at times.
| magnusvictor chapter 141 . 11/30
Well, now I wish Aria could/would come back for a bit. Just long enough to confuse everyone with a "Oy! What the fuck have you done to my station? It looks boring as shit, now!"
| Difdi chapter 162 . 11/29
Humanity eternally enslaved, even their thoughts shackled to the extent they cannot notice being slaves really isn’t HFY.
| Difdi chapter 161 . 11/29
And once again Shepard displays how he will never be free of the Catalyst — he has the same type of reaction to organics getting too close to the truth that the Catalyst did: kill all the ones that know, no Ascension allowed. It would only be slightly harder than killing her to add her to the harvest, Shepard expended more effort taunting her than adding her would take.
Even hundreds of thousands of years after killing the Catalyst, he remains enslaved. What makes it even worse than normal forms of enslavement is he isn’t capable of realizing he is still a slave. Any normal slave can dream of freedom, but Shepard can’t even do that much.
The ones who were denied Ascension were the lucky ones. And by his actions in ‘rewarding’ Sisqing, he might even realize that on some subconscious level that his slave programming will never let him become consciously aware of.
| Difdi chapter 160 . 11/29
You have typos in the date stamps of this chapter.
The first scene is 271701 after human ascension. The second scene is supposedly only 90510 years later, but is listed as 650319 after human ascension which is well over three times 95000. You have the third scene as 197598 years after the second scene, but the second scene is 650319 after human ascension, while the third scene is only 559809 after human ascension. The fourth scene says it is 26997 years after the third scene, but is only 586806 after human ascension. Even if you ignore that 650319 as a typo, there are simple addition errors between years from previous scene and years after human ascension.
| Difdi chapter 157 . 11/28
The AI raised a good point though: While Ascended got to where they are by a different path, and their technology is MUCH higher, the end result is identical. Ascended are AI. The fact that they have genetic samples along with them doesn’t change that fact. They are programmed to reject the idea, even reject it violently, but the fact is inescapable. Digitisation is a lower tech method of doing the same thing as Ascension, just without the genetic samples — a destructive scan that reads the brain into a computer core.
| Difdi chapter 131 . 11/26
You have a typo in this chapter. There is no such word as “uquicious” in the English language. A Google search for the word brings up this chapter as the only search result on the entire internet, and suggests it might be a misspelling of loquacious.
| Neroscurse chapter 141 . 11/26
Still enjoying the story! A bit slower to make it last longer, but a wonderfully done story. Thanks for posting.
| Difdi chapter 108 . 11/24
The solution for why some oculi are hanging back and not firing is obvious — oculi can miss their shots, and until you get hit there’s no way to know if you were shot at with a target painting laser or a GARDIAN laser. So don’t make the remote comm oculi hang back, mix them in with the main force. Anyone engaged will prioritize shooting ones that are shooting at them or their friends, and combat tunnel vision will ensure the fact that some oculi ALWAYS miss goes unnoticed except maybe by intel analysts later on. A targeting laser requires MUCH less power and internal volume than the standard GARDIAN laser, so it won’t interfere with the quantum comms.
Once it becomes clear that some oculi aren’t firing because they are flying bombs (though the targeting laser trick would work on bomb oculi too), defenders will assume non-firing oculi are bombs too, which makes them a much higher targeting priority than firing oculi, which is another reason to give the comm oculi weak lasers.
| Difdi chapter 81 . 11/22
You have a recurring typo in this chapter: a large military group is a corps (pronounced core) not a corp.
| magnusvictor chapter 125 . 11/22
The biggest (and most important) "BLAM!" in (fictional) history.
| Neroscurse chapter 137 . 11/22
Figures Udina would botch a disease mission. Don't the ascended have that old earth game of destroying the world with a virus? lol
Another excellent chapter, NC
| Difdi chapter 75 . 11/21
There is a product called Le Whif — it’s a chocolate inhaler, no heat or fire involved, and it’s not a vaporizer. I wonder if Jack could use one?
It occurs to me that it might now be possible to assassinate the Emperor by handing him a lit cigarette...
| Difdi chapter 72 . 11/21
Smoking kills! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Also, how tall are Nur, exactly? You said 2.3 meters in this chapter, but you said 2.1 in a previous chapter.