This makes me want to kill myself so I can wipe this from my brain, this was very strange a ruined my childhood

WHY MY EYES WISH TO NO LONGER EXIST AND WISH TO LEAVE THIS MORTAL REALM

This story is old but still makes me laugh out loud so much xD This is what happens when a virgin teenager tries to write smut and I'm just dying. This could be turned into a drnking game or bingo card of bad smut cliches xDD

My husband loves this facfic but think she’ll has a fatter cock than him and he need to know more about the centimeters of his cock. This is the best thing I’ve ever read please post more. Ps I’m drunk

I loved Meade me cum 4c

nice job. im going to be starting a yotube channel and i wanted to let you know. its minecraft and roblox and fortnite and well video games in general. hope youll watch it. if you do dont tell anyone im into sex. please.

i would like to die right now

Needs a sex story about Meta Knight fucking Zelda, King Dedede fucking Peach, and a section where characters that aren't fighters fucking their respective main characters for each series.

You got issues

Finn Johnson: writing about sex doesn't suddenly mean you're free of criticism, and what i pointed out were very valid points. when i say "stop making your men so gross," i don't mean "stop writing your men in sexual situations." i mean "stop writing your men like LITERAL rapists and treating it like it's sexy or something to laugh about." or at the very least, slap a warning on your fic so people know that at least on SOME level, you aren't an absolutely disgusting human being who seriously thinks this shit is normal.

anyway, since i actually did read the latest two chapters you put up, allow me to reiterate:
1. learn more about sex and anatomy before writing smut. seriously, google is your best friend. it takes literally two seconds to look up some of the scenarios you've written about and realize they make no sense.
2. learn to see women as actual PEOPLE, instead of random sex toys who exist solely for the enjoyment of your male characters/readers (even then though, i'm pretty sure most male readers would have higher standards than this).
3. stop writing your men as actual rapists. i believe in only one of these chapters was the sex between a man and woman totally 100% consensual (the palutena/ike one, but it's been awhile since i read it so i could be wrong). in every single one of your other chapters where you depict sex between a man and a woman, the woman is forced into the situation and only begrudgingly accepts it or literally has to be DRUGGED to do it. the former is just gross; the latter is literally rape.

there. i'd say in light of the latest two chapters, these points still apply, and hey! this time i even elaborated a little more so you can understand more of where i'm coming from.

maybe in the future you'll read my reviews and realize there's actually something to note here, instead of just thinking to yourself "lol this is a sex fic don't like don't read." i enjoy sex fics very, VERY much. doesn't change the fact that this one is completely disgusting, and you can do much better if you actually bothered to give it a little thought.

why does it concern you? this is a story about sex. nothing else. if that's too gross, don't read it

1. what is your fascination with making boobs bounce so much?
2. learn how sex and anatomy work /before/ writing M-rated stories.
3. learn how to write women in a more realistic and respectful manner.
4. stop making your men so gross, too. we get it, they're reflective of yourself. that doesn't need to show in your writing, though.