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pls update soon

Here are my questions. 1. Besides what was said in the summary, what else is the fanfic about? 2. What locations are to be used in the fanfic? 3. Could you be specific on when it takes place? 4. How old is anyone in the fanfic? 5. What Pokémon are owned by any of the main characters in the fanfic? 6. How did they get any of those Pokémon in the fanfic? 7. In fact, how long have they owned the Pokémon for in this fic? 8. What was going on, when the fanfic began? Be sure you can give your answers to this.

Pikachu can learn surf though bydefeating the Round 2 Prime Cup Master Ball class using a Pikachu from Yellow Version through the Transfer Pak accessory and im pretty sure in Pokémon Sword and Shield, every Pikachu can learn Surf.

Hey nice finfiction stories

The story is too far back in time, least for my taste. It were just dates without the specific year attached to it, I think it would be better because the standard of tech used so far in the X2 (I believe it's called) is too far off to where Pokemon was in 2006 somewhere in between Johto and Hoenn. Leaving the year blank allows us readers to establish our own year where this tech would be best suited in.

The pace is fine but still for the title being the Untraveled Road, you follow a very linear path of events already passed. The title suggesting a new road will be taken leaves much to be desired as perhaps readers like myself where hoping for different events to play out not just catching Pokemon wise (which it has) but in the way they travel and do things.

Ex. Not having Misty or Brock travel with them, much less adding to group with Grayson and the other girl. A small focused group to me would be better and would show more independence as they wouldn't depend on Brock's cooking and other experiences to survive as they have in the anime and so many other stories before this one.

Then to add to that the newest characters (again Grayson and what's her name) have the exact goals/career intentions as Leaf and Brock. Then what are Brock and Leaf doing in the story if you had a Breeder and PWT contestant already waiting to be introduced. If Grayson had been interested in Breeding rater than outright declare he was a Breeder it would have been better as he could ask Brock for advice in deciding whether he should be a Breeder or not.

Plus Ash could challenge the Gyms in a different order.

Ex. Bypassing Cerulean heading east and going through the Dark Tunnel to head to Lavender and from there head south to challenge the Saffron City his second Gym battle would by all accounts be the Untraveled Road indeed. Just give it some thought. Don't do what others do and do the Pewter, Cerulean, Vermillion, Celadon, etc. route others do. Be unique.

The rate of capture is a bit fast too. Not even into the second Gym and Ash has 5 Pokemon (I think) with the Zubat he caught where as most trianers by now have 2 if not 3 Pokemon at best. He's gonna have trouble balancíng out his team as the story goes on.

To me Fanfiction capture rates should be somewhat akin to Nozlocke rules. 1 encounter per route and you don't always get what you encounter. Leaving room for the team to not grow at an accelerated rate and have room for the trainer to grow as a person because they couldn't complete their objective. Leading to them figuring out the best way to capture Pokemon may not always be just throw a Pokeball and hope for the best. Most of Ash's canon captures have been Pokemon agreeing to travel with him as opposed to catching them through an actual battle.

That hasn't been the case here thankfully but still he should slow down and be a bit more selective of the team he chooses. Don't want him being a Gary. Just catching Pokemon for the sake of it.

Other than that the story is good. Good chapter lengths. Same with battles. Just need to be true to the story name and take the Untraveled Road. Really push the envelope with the story and present something we've yet to see before. If you can manage that I think this story will be a huge hit.

Hope this helps.

It's really great, but there are some times when you change the tense it's in. Most of it is in past-tense, but sometimes it switches to present-tense, which is a bit confusing to read. You should try to keep it in the same tense, unless you're doing it on purpose. :)

Excellent chapter and the gang stopping there first team rocket group

You're living up to the hype generated by your summary! Nice work!

But after you finished the chapter, its not "and scene", its "and cut". (sorry for being an a**)

I really like your ideas in the story so far, but it feels like you aren't really sure what tone you want to set. It goes from these light hearted childish moments that would be seen in the anime, such as Misty with the mallet, to talking about the death of pokemon. You should look at where you want to take the story and try to make the attitude of the story fit that theme!

This was a good chapter. I liked the dose of reality you injected with team rocket killing off some of the wild Pokémon. It definitely helped to make them more threatening and credible villains. I like the nod to Silvers past with team rocket. Will the squirtle, bulbasaur, and charmander Ash got in the show going to join the gang in this story?

Awesome job

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I thought that this chapter was excellent. The plane scene was very well written, and the way that it was written made it feel as though I was watching it first hand. You are not an amateur writer. You have masterfully written a story opener that is a breath of fresh air to me as a reader. I look forward to reading the rest of this fan fiction and other works of yours.

wow also leaf is female right that's good.

hope you update soon and tell on your youtube page when its updated if you can?