Aww, you didn't include Kumadori's little cherry blossom speech
Oh and we really are just gonna make up band (heh) aid fixes for giving Gin a Logia until New World, huh

Yeah, so far it seems like there really is no idea on what to do with Gin

Well that was just bad
Talk about over-correction

Not sure why you went out of your way to change Miss Valentine's and Miss Goldenweek's canon names, Mikita and Arianne

the heck was that about Sanji for? why downplay him this much?

I am genuinely crying

Why would you give him the frickin goro goro, just after you said the crew wasn't going to eat or sell it! Nami should have gotten it at least. I have literally been struggling to read this, from the moment you let Gin join, Koby getting a fruit wasn't the problem, the problem was that it was a zoan, not just a zoan, a dinosaur zoan, and not a cool dinosaur, but a herbivore, a triceratops, one of the most basic and lame dinosaurs to ever walk the earth. The "Goda" gag was funny ONCE. Enel is a vital part of one piece which is why I was looking like the swamp ordeal mf after reading that gin killed him, Gin isn't even the weakest crew member, he didn't need to eat the damn fruit he could easily take out every single marine that boarded the ship! I'm going to give you one last chance ok, someone said nami gets pregnant which is weird AF but it better be after the timeskip. You're a frickin donkey, don't deviate from cannon too much especially with character names and personality, if you want them to have a fruit, give them an original fruit, not a result of one of their fights, they are honestly becoming one of the least buoyant pirates in the grand line. Sighhhhhhhhh, just please. Rewrite this.

i know this is a double review but it's really stressing me out lol. marianne (miss goldenweek) is literally the first word of her wiki article. you couldn't do take two seconds to look her up? i just don't understand and it's incredibly distracting

miss goldenweek has a name in canon. not really sure why you changed it to Grace...

Nunca me dijo si podía o no, pero hice el audiofic en youtube.
Por si alguien me quiere dar feedback.
watch?vZEuFdIyIfPU

Chapter 24/46: I know I said I wanted to see Rumble Ball Coby but... not like this :(

Just finished chapter 11/33 (guessing 11 is the new formatting and 33 was the old one). They're on their way to Yuuba and I've got to say I'm quite enjoying the story so far. I hope Coby gets to try a Rumble Ball in the future, would be fun so see more Triceratops "points".

Zoan powers kind of suck because no one can write them good. Plus you saying ace thought Luffy was asexual just turned this story off for me even in the show Luffy has gotten a nose bleed from seeing Nami naked, dont know why they would even know that word.

I remember trying to read this before dont know why i stopped, tho i dont like how weak Colby is with an ancient zoan he barely held Tashigi back. Thats just weird he also shouldnt be tired by the walk to the ship. Plus "Graces" name and powers she has a real one and her powers are way different than in ur Fic i mean she could draw in the sky while standing on the ground.

it's desert not dessert