Hahaha Fou literally playing wingman for Shirou, he's gonna be so mad when he discovers his "partner" squandered the opportunity he bought him, will need a lot of bacon to make up for it.

Are you kidding, dude? Tsubaki and Shirou getting closer is such a priority to me! I hope they can be happy, whether they actually hook up or not. That said, I like the take you have with Riser Fenex, and I loved the Third Person bit tossed in near the end. I have a D&D character that refers to himself in the third person, so it was honestly hilarious to me.

I also appreciate Shirou getting along to an extent with Ravel and how mature Irisviel is in giving Riser advice on the situation. I've loved this story since the first chapter and it just seems to get better every chapter. Funny how interesting an anime/light novel's events can become when you chuck Shirou into it. Looking forward to seeing how the Riser Fenex arc ends.

you, my friend, is going to make me lose sleep for a few days to catch up with your stories!
but I won't regret it.

been looking for your stories but somehow it doesn't show up in dxd crossover...

A relationship is 2 sided but a forced marriage is not. Neither of them should have to choose between family and freedom. Riser should definitely sympathize more with Rias since they are both in the same position and respect Rias's wishes. Otherwise he is just as shallow as she makes him out to be. Neither of them have any actual obligation to behave a certain way with each other since neither of them were able to consent when their match was fixed. Rias has set out to get her way (that being freedom) through any means she could, but for someone who supposedly wants the marriage to work Riser has not. I don't see what Rias should have to do for Riser in this case. She gets a way worse deal by being stuck in a loveless marriage while he gets to keep his loving harem, unless it's okay for her to have a harem too?

Sorry for the long rant. I do enjoy reading this fic, but the moral reasoning at times feels inadequate or strange personally.

You know this is the best fate stay night crossover in my personal opinion. Now back to it. I remember reading on fate lore that the prototype of Excalibur was caladbolg. And Excalibur galatine was based off the design of Excalibur so I was wondering if you can used that as material for the next arc that the real Excalibur was never broken merely the design was replicated by the christian god and the angels.

I am disliking Irisviel. Hell she is not being a good mother, and someone pointed it out, she failed to see how a girl degraded herself to please a man.

It's a very good fanfic I hope you continue it quickly

Well then, that just got awkward between Shirou and Tomoe.

Gender balance is wack in this chapter

AYY TSUBAKI GETTEM

I know you ask for constructive criticism but I personally have nothing to criticize about the story or chapter. I really enjoy your writing style and the way you've chosen to handle things. That said, I'm expecting Shirou to stay in character next chapter and do something spectacularly dumb, just like any other Shirou would do.

I would love to see Shirou and Tsubaki get together. Maybe give Shirou a small harem.

there are a few key differences that I would like to point out about riser, yes I love the new perspective you're given about him but I don't agree with him not being the sole problem. Rias is a teenager that goes to school in the human world while riser is a young adult, Rias didn't get to go to the underworld often and most of the time it's only the summer where she spends time with her family. although I get her not making an effort let's not forget that, Riser open grops Rias in the main show, and not only insults everyone of her perrage throughout the whole meeting.

the interaction between ire, shirou, Riser is also what I don't agree with although I can understand her points she fails to understand that Shirou witness a women willing to degrad herself because of Riser that not something that should be taken lightly and Shirou being shot down by his mother all the time, he sign an idiot and although he didn't know the big picture, Riser sint a bad guy but he is someone that needs to be taken to extreme measures to stop what he was doing. after all Riser in the main story version took joy in beating issei and watching Rias suffer for it that's not something that should be look over.

I understand that you're portraying Raiser as having his own issues and a bit more sympathetic, but it still shouldn't excuse him from being a huge dickhead. The only reason he's having a courteous conversation with Shirou is because of his Mom. And he certainly left a bad impression during their first meet-up. Rias might not be blameless, but Raiser certainly didn't help.

I agree with you, Riser is annoying but not evil. When you consider he's from the same race as Diodora, Riser is not that bad.