Reviews for Harry Steel Through Time part one: 1885-1890 |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I hope Tommy goes to the School of Witchcraft and Wizardry whether it's Beauxbatons, Durmstrang or Hogwarts. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please update and post more chapters |
![]() ![]() You are a f*king racist |
![]() ![]() ![]() Can't wait to see the next 'time frame', and what the 4 Time agents do to the dark wizards, Dumbledore, and everything else up to the 40s. What about the Spanish American War, WWI, and WWII? The Mexican American War? The colonization of California, Alaska, Hawaii, and Arizona? |
![]() ![]() ![]() You write a very good story. I have enjoyed reading/ his very much. Thank you... |
![]() ![]() As I said in one of the earlier chapters I've read this before and thoroughly enjoyed it. Though for some reason I though it unfinished. I know I was hoping you'd get to the next in the series as well as doing more of the Investigator Steel story. The other Steel story I've also enjoyed. I've been eagerly awaiting more of that one as well. I've read these type of stories called Gun and Car porn but disregard that as those who can't write it insult it. For crying out loud! Harry Potter was born in 1980 not 1235 BC! He knows about guns and cars even if the ancient fossils like Good Ole Fumblemort want to drag the magical world even further back in time! The magical world JKR created for her books turns 99% of the Muggleborns into brain dead buffoons by the end of their seventh year. They've spent so much time learning how not to see how far behind the muggle world the magical world that when they've finished the so called magical education they're too dumb to live anywhere else. During those same seven years they've been repeatedly told by their so called "Betters " that they're lower then whale shit on the bottom of the ocean. Unfortunately, they don't stop and think about just what that's gonna mean for their future in the magical world. Your Harry Steel actually took a look at that when he got a Black Letter and realized something HAD to change! And worked to do just that. But just imagine the chaos it would cause in the magical world of Briton if every Muggleborn and Halfblood looked at what Hogwash taught and didn't teach and decided to continue their muggle education? That would then give them an option that the Purebloods didn't have nor even think about. Though, in the long run it really doesn't matter as that magical world is doomed. The so called Purebloods will soon breed themselves out of existence. They are working on it very hard after all. It won't be long before they wake up to find their son or daughter has no one to marry other then a first cousin or brother or sister. Will they then open their eyes and realize they need the Muggleborn and Halfbloods they drove off? I would hope so but I seriously doubt they'd be that doubt they'd swallow their pride and admit it even if only to their immediate family. But in this story Harry, Hermione, Neville and Abby got all those " REJECTS " and formed several businesses that not only helped them but changed their lives forever! As well as changing the magical world. |
![]() ![]() You just had to use that joke from Charlie and the Chocolate Factory didn't you? That was a great movie. Gene Wilder was great in that. |
![]() ![]() I've read this and the Harry Steel story and enjoyed them. I do totally agree with Harry's idea to kill Fumblemort, Grindelwald and Riddle. With those three gone along with people like Malfoy Sr. maybe the magical world in Briton would be a much better place. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi, First, thank you for writing a fun tail to read and for sharing it with us. I've enjoyed your Abby character in both this and your old west story. This one had a bit more background information than the other. I think at one time or another, everyone has figured out how to play their favorite RPG game, starting their character out with a bunch of gear, skills and money. I used to do that with the Darklands game until I came to realize that it was the beginning of the game that presented the real challenge. That said, there is a part of me that wishes that your group had started out with one cracked wand between them, no money, two of them wounded and one broken model 17 with three bullets. I started reading this, or in the case of the old west one, thinking about how the stories could end, In both cases, unless you were seriously planning on writing a sequel, it would have been fun to have carried or jumped the tales to September of 1991. Alternatively, you could have had a six page scene with the four of them having dinner, discussing their plans for the next fifty years at a high level. Your way was fine, if somewhat abrupt. Thank you for sharing your story. Old-Crow |
![]() ![]() ![]() please come back to writing even if it is not often |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very good chapter I enjoy your stories about Harry Steele I think there is a very good fanfiction hope you write boy thank you |
![]() ![]() Oh ya! There's a whole lot of crap on the horizon! In a few years, there'll be the Great San Fran Earthquake followed a few years later by WWI. And after that comes the Spanish Flue Pandemic followed by the Roaring Twenties and The Great Depression and the Dust Bowl. Of course, the Dust Bowl could be cut short by magic but would they? Having those huge farms protected from the weather would it really matter to B&S? Anywho, I'd really like it if you'd come back to your stories. I truly enjoy reading them. You're a good story teller. |
![]() ![]() Still an engrossing read. |
![]() ![]() I don't see Tommy taking the elixir for a few years yet. I think he'll marry Penny and have a few kids first. Besides, he's only fifteen at this point. But he'll eventually run more of the company or expand the meat division to keep up with demand. If his parents and uncle and aunt weren't damn near immortal I think he'd be running the entire B&S company after they retired. Though he'd have to find someone like his father and uncle to train new agents. But that might be rather easy come to think of it. Have one of the Black Level agents take over. Now the Lovegood Seer was a complete surprise to me. But if her family being part of the company keep Luna safe and she has friends before attending Hogwarts, that's a major plus for her. I'm hoping Harry can keep Lyra alive beyond 1939. I don't think the Steels nor the Blackwells can stop WWI but I think they can shorten WWII. Maybe even prevent the Holocaust. |
![]() ![]() Hmmm, you do realize that Harry's twins are bastards, don't you? They were born out of wedlock after all. Not that it'll matter to the family. But anyways, I don't remember the name of the gun but I saw it on youtube and it looks almost like the four-barreled rifle in this chapter. The thing was a monster and the gun had a tendency to crack after being fired. It was very old and there were only a very few ever made. The thing only had two barrels but the smoke after firing was like a car doing a burn-out! The report was so loud it caused a tent wall next to it to have waves in it. The guy shooting it had to take a short break between firing each barrel. I think he said it was a shorter version of an Elephant Gun. I think it was made for an Indian Prince somewhere around the late 1800s. I think he said because the barrels were shorter it was quicker to bring on target. It was either earlier this year or last year that I saw it so I really don't remember it that well. But it sounds similar to the one in this story. |