Reviews for The Return
autymne chapter 1 . 12/19/2016
The first chapter seems a bit...rushed. You have this character introduced but give us no detailed on who she is or what she acts like. Maybe flesh out the character more next chapter and give us some backstory as to why she and uldren are a thing as the latter is more or less rupulsed by the guardians.
jsm1978 chapter 1 . 12/15/2016
Not a huge fan of romance stories, so don't know how long I will stick around with this one, but you do have a decent start here. The one thing I would caution - you have Petra obviously interested in your character, and the description hints at a romance with Uldren; having everyone just fall for your character or think they're the most wonderful thing ever, is a good way to get the "Mary Sue" label attached. I'd make sure there are some antagonistic presences (and not just a jealous romantic rival) to keep things balanced a bit.
daydreambcrnHasMoved chapter 1 . 12/15/2016
Interesting...wonder what Uldren will do now :)
Cy.Naomhan chapter 1 . 12/13/2016
The story definitely piqued my interest...