Reviews for Naruto: The Uchiha Chronicles |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Why do you Focus so much on Sakura?! |
![]() ![]() ![]() im so glad to find a story i haven't read yet, im really enjoying this so far |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really hope this story hasent been abandoned. I might just get patreon to catch up. |
![]() ![]() Update please |
![]() ![]() When the hell is he gonna reveal his Sharingan!? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story I’ve probably read it around 20 times and read every chapter that comes out on your patreon (Im Jonah Vogel) keep up the good work |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome chapter and looking forward to the next one |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story could’ve been good. In fact it should’ve been good. The first few chapters set an interesting foundation. The grammar and punctuation are all above average, and the writer seemed to have focus. That’s the good. Usually I try to keep in mind that the creator is doing this for free as a project of passion. However this author has made it clear multiple times that they intend to do this as a full time job and are currently accepting money from people for this work, I’m going to review it with those intentions in mind. Personally as someone who works with writers, the thought of making money off of someone else’s writing is slightly gross, so if you do it, you better do a damn good job. Quickly though the story became extremely predictable and underdeveloped. And it’s all because of two problems. The first problem is the characters. While written decently enough to fit into their own unique buckets, the bucks are only a millimeter deep. The characters are, for lack of a better word, boring and the story is surviving because it’s an interesting concept despite the characters being made of balsa wood. Satsuki isn’t a likable character. She’s shared no noteworthy emotional moments or experiences with Naruto, despite having been best friends for years. There’s no affection, no kindness saved especially for him, just grunts and ‘hmmmms’. In the beginning I thought these moments were being withheld for brevity while establishing the scene, but now in the later stages of the story I’m realizing they simply don’t exist. They don’t have deep moments where they talk about grief which is supposed to be a defining characteristic of her character. We don’t see moments where the two of them are together outside of the confines of their job. She’s just not someone you’re rooting for because we haven’t been given the chance. And at this point if we were given the chance, it would feel undeserved. She’s coasting on the coattails of the original sasuke, but that guy had a more romantic relationship with Naruto than Satsuki does at this point. Wouldn’t be a problem, but for some reason this loveless book has a romance tag. Then you have Naruto. Oh boy. This should’ve been one of the coolest Naruto’s ever. He’s been raised by Madara since he was a child. He’s got the sharingan AND he can use shadow clones for training, two of the most overpowered training tools in the Naruto universe. The kyuubi also already cooperates with him. So why does he fucking suck? Why is he still so soft? Why doesn’t he feel beyond capable like he should be. Where is his confidence? Not as a ninja but as a person. You’re telling me itachi joined anbu at 11 after being trained by absolute nobodies and Naruto is struggling with gennin after being trained by the most legendary shinobi of all time? And it’s even more annoying because it’s not like he doesn’t have the tools. He has more options and abilities than he did originally, he just doesn’t make good use of them. He just doesn’t have the mindset you’d expect from someone raised by one of the most legendary shinobi to ever exist. He’s not creative or scrappy like his original self. Go watch the Madara vs elemental nations fight again and tell me this Naruto feels like his grandson. If this is the result of leaving the path of hatred they need to get they ass back on. Naruto is the konohamaru of this bloodline. Just a complete embarrassment due to the standards set by his ancestors. Then we have the second and arguably biggest problem with the entire story. There are two secrets. Two. That ruined everything. 1. That Naruto Naruto is an uchiha 2. that Madara was his grandfather. Kakashi knows, the third knows, fucking Sakura knows. EVEN HAKU KNOWS. But he won’t tell Satsuki? ARE YOU SMOKING CRACK? Why!? No fucking clue. Literally zero logical thought went into this decision from the author. Satsuki fucking met his grandfather! Multiple times! Do you realize how big of a fuck you this is to Satsuki? This secret didn’t need to be kept, and seems like it was only done so to eventually make Satsuki mad. It just makes Naruto so unlikeable. This is the guy we’re supposed to root for? She’s his best friend who feels alone in the world and all he had to do was be honest with her. She’s the woman that at some point the author will try to convince us Naruto loves. Just telling her the truth would change her entire perspective on life. She’d have a legitimate path to not only restore her clan, but also to be with someone who she could love. Someone who is supposed to understand her. All he has to do is be honest. AND THERES NO REASON HE SHOULDN’T BE! There’s been no point that it would’ve been a bad time to pull her aside and have an honest conversation. I get he’s scared of “that man” but it’s not like Satsuki is going to tell anyone?! She’s probably the only person he CAN trust. Also He’s actively putting his team at risk by fighting with restrictions. Why is he putting limiters on himself? His lies are actively putting them in more danger. This is not how you create a likeable character. And then there’s the way it was revealed. They’ve been in danger so many times before but he decided this is the time to just yell it, TO OROCHIMARU OF ALL PEOPLE?! MY STEAL YO EYES HIMSELF?! WHYYYY?! Literally the only worse option would’ve been danzo. As an author you can’t have the reason for the secret be “I can’t let my enemies find out” and then also have your character yell those same secrets to the enemy the first chance you get. Why did he even yell his name out like an edgelord at all. Why not just active the sharingan and let orochimaru be confused what’s happening. Let him think that he’s caught in a genjutsu for fucksake. Why is he this dumb? What’s the point of keeping it a secret if you’re going to yell it out to the most dangerous enemy you’ve ever faced. I thought the whole point was to not let his enemies find out? It’s because the author needed a reason to drive a wedge between Satsuki and Naruto, and everyone saw it coming from a mile away. Which also means Kakashi would’ve seen this coming, the third would’ve seen this coming, and Madara would’ve seen this coming. And nobody thought it was a good idea to get all the secrets out on the table before you create a monumental flight risk and drive a wedge between one of the most power teams that could potentially exist. Which bring me to my final point. They aren’t a good couple or even interesting characters together. They don’t talk to each other. They aren’t honest with each other. They have no likeable qualities that are brought out by the other. All in all they really shouldn’t be together. Their communication styles aren’t compatible. They don’t really hang out. They don’t open up to each other. They’re just…colleagues. Peers. It’s a shame this was wasted. This had so much potential. Hopefully the author reads this and sees it as an opportunity to do better next time. Don’t write yourself into corners, work on developing your characters, and if you want to do romance make sure the characters are shown to be compatible romantically, not just as fighters. You can do it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome chapter man keep it up and update again soon as possible thanks. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Genial gracias por actualizar la historia |
![]() ![]() ![]() excellent keep going |
![]() ![]() ![]() Tsunade is a piece of work. that stunt could have had permanant consequences, messing with his nervous system...i hope she is actualkt punished for that and it isnt just swept under the rug |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() To short for the wait. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Idc who the other girls are beside sasuki but one of em no the second girl should be Hinata and i know im 60 chapters late but still |