Reviews for Calendar Ships 01: January - You Start The Year Off Fine
DolbyDigital chapter 1 . 3/16/2017
I thought this was a really nice story. I loved the premise. I do think this would benefit from a second read-through, though, or perhaps a beta, as there were quite a few typos. Also, the line [her mask matching its ruby shade of her gown and frames with diamonds] should be [framed] and doesn’t need [of her gown], and I think [multi coloured] should be hyphenated, but I’m not entirely sure on that. And there were a few mistakes with punctuation, particularly in dialogue tags.

However, I really loved your characterisations, particularly of Harry, and I thought including Eggsy’s accent was a nice touch, though at times it was a little hard to read (the only reason I knew what you meant it to sound like in some places is because that’s how half the guys in my school talked).

I did think the ending felt a little incomplete, though. The majority of the story had a plot that was never quite resolved, so it might have been nice had you continued with that storyline after the kiss, just to give this a proper resolution. (Also, if you wanted to speed things up, you can just add that the lyrics filtered in through the window or whatever it was, because most people know the song even if they don’t know all the words, and a lot of people tend to skip over large chunks of lyrics anyway.) However, I did really like this story; again, I loved the premise, it just would have been nice to see a proper resolution to the starting plot.
J chapter 1 . 3/1/2017
Was pretty good till it turned into a porn parody.