Enjoyed this, the dialogue (as with the main game) seemed a little stilted, but otherwise a good start! (Read and enjoyed your halo story)

Please keep writing, it was an awesome beginning. But how did he get a pipe pistol? And he is younger then in the game, is there a story behind it or was it just a mistake?

Nice job so
far. Hope to
see more soon.
Sincerely, Sierra
Nova

This is a very creative concept and I love the idea I know you just started this story but update soon I can't wait to read more. Have a good one cya.

-Hell