Reviews for Into The Black |
---|
kaskazi117 chapter 13 . 10/28 Please keep writing! |
PequenaLontra chapter 13 . 10/24 Adoro sua história. Espero que você possa encontrar inspiração para continuar a escrevê-la. |
WindbornesWord chapter 4 . 10/19 I’ve been re-reading this yet again, so I’ll also say that I’d love to see this get updated once more and start being written. Easily one of the better Fics I’ve read. That and maybe to suggest you try backing up the story to AO3 since FFnet has been crapping out frequently this past year. |
bleachorange chapter 13 . 10/18 Ok, so I do need to state that first and foremost, this feels like a facelift of Plums' story 'Last Second Savior'. The additional character perspectives are nice, but overall the story beats are almost 1:1. Some of this is due to borrowing the initial premise, I am sure, but there are many, many sections that cover plot considerations and character reactions that happen in that story, with slight tweaks to have a character decide to do something different. I think you have talent as an author - the other perspectives show this well enough - and encourage you to break away from this other story and let this one breathe. |
bleachorange chapter 11 . 10/17 So, I realize in an earlier chapter Harry said he was an Auror. But in chapter 1 he was being considered to join the aurors. Here again he says he has much experience as an auror. So I am going to consider chapter 1's mention as a failure in editing and move on, but I thought you should know. |
bleachorange chapter 6 . 10/17 "Told me you did, that the source of our salvation was Master Secura yes? That an ally had warned her I believe?" She nodded agreement. "Then urgent task I have for you. Go to Felucia you must, find and protect Master Secura and those who aided her you must. In their debt we Jedi are, as are all those who resist Sidious now. Poor gratitude would it be if to abandon them we were." If you were ever to revise the story, this might need editing. I am unsure if Aayla told Shaak Ti about both Harry and Hermione (I think it was just Harry speaking up), but even if that is the case, I dont believe Yoda knows their current condition. He should probably be asking them to aid Aayla, ascertain the situation, and assist them as needed. It feels like this is an instance of what the author knows bleeding over into what the character knows, but shouldnt. |
bleachorange chapter 5 . 10/17 The perspectives of Skywalker and Organa here are a nice touch. Well done. |
bleachorange chapter 2 . 10/17 Ah, it clicked for me at the start of the chapter. Obviously it was Felucia, but the Wander Star HAS to be Zonama Sekot. Sounds like a real bitch to locate tbh. |
naedinefebruary2.0 chapter 1 . 10/16 Wassup, Having read your absorbing Story, Into The Black, I found many things to admire in the weighty narrative and imaginative flair. Your storytelling is truly remarkable, and I really do think that it can reach a wider audience as a comic. I'm a commission artist with broad experience in converting literature into striking comic format. I will be proud to reformat your story into this dynamic format. Let me just take you through some of my portfolio samples of previous works. Your literature is a masterpiece, and as goes the proverb, A comic can capture the essence of the story, so that would add more power to your literature. I look forward to the possibility of working together. As I am open to commission I'd really appreciate that if you could commission me for this. Do message me on discord or twitter with your story name. Here is my Contacts discord : naedinefebruary Twitter : naedinefebruary Instagram: naedinefebruary Hope to hear back from you soon. |
Kaflaful chapter 1 . 10/8 If there was ever one story I wish you’d take up writting again, it’s this one. This is easily my favorite Star Wars crossover. The ony two that even come close are I Still Haven’t Found What I’m Looking For by kathryn518 and Resurrection of Flesh and Blood by SlyPhoenix. I think one reason is because this is the only Harry and Hermione pairing Star Wars crossover I’ve ever found. At least that I can remember actually reading and not moving on from after the first chapter. I really hope you come back to it. |
ThunderSphinx chapter 13 . 9/30 Still hoping you come back to this. I just had to read it again. |
Ng chapter 3 . 8/31 You cant run into yourself from the past if your from the future there is no two of you in exitence in 2 different times that is just tv and movies telling you that nonsence. |
Guest chapter 13 . 3/27 Nicely done, hope you come back to this. |
Daemoniorum chapter 13 . 12/8/2023 Utterly loved this fic. |
ThunderSphinx chapter 12 . 11/1/2023 Of course, if Obi-Wan hadn't snuck aboard and started the confrontation, Padmé would have never been attacked. Kenobi used her as bait. |