Reviews for Jaune Ryu-Long, the Dragon Contractor
GeraltRex chapter 66 . 11/19
This is a good story, I loved reading it and I hope that you can continue it. If you are having issues with timeline events, I would suggest writing out all the events that you want to take place in your docs and then organize them to where they would fit in your timeline. If the problem has become that you have a ton of events plans for your story, focus on a single one at a time and then work on coinciding them with the time of other events.
Cadmus8 chapter 4 . 11/14
Reading Jaune say his lines feel 's more of an informal but sometimes shy type of person. (Even if he gets raised by dragons in this fic. And even then, those dragon's speech patterns are pretty informal) instead of writing
"Aided" and "Such words are unbecoming of a lady", you should write "Helped" and "Saying words like those ruin your 'perfect girl' image"

It just feels more natural. Jaune just isn't the type to use fancy words.
Cadmus8 chapter 3 . 11/14
The story and the whole premise is actually pretty good. But it would do you good to make your writing style more... I think "subtle" would be the best word here. If you could weave your words better, then you'll be golden.

Then again, this is just the 3rd chapter out of 66. So you've probably improved by leaps and bounds later on.
GeraltRex chapter 54 . 11/11
Bal Bloo is the sloth bear: Baloo from the Jungle Books.
funny thing, Sienna Khan (canon character, RIP) is the female version of Shere Khan from Jungle book.
I fell like I should know who Natia is supposed to be, but right now, I can't. Also I liked Wong, he was a great character
NOBLE chapter 66 . 11/1
Y el cap 67
GeraltRex chapter 19 . 10/30
Because of the way that Boartusks attack, I have pretty much always imagining them as Donphans from Pokémon. Small gray, elephant-like Pokémon with a thick, black band of hide running down the length of its back and extending to the tip of its long trunk.
The OC maker chapter 19 . 10/16
Minecraft Creepers...
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David Garrido chapter 48 . 10/13
Kagome and sango or kohaku and sango
Redery chapter 1 . 10/4
Juane dragon dragon lol
Jamie333 chapter 1 . 9/26
",ryulong" lol at least try to sound cool. both of these words mean dragon in different languages jaune dragon dragon haha
Tactical-Magician chapter 1 . 9/17
Amazing work, hope it reaches a conclusion someday.
Guest chapter 66 . 9/4
Please update! This is one of the best stories!
ItsFreerealestate69420 chapter 1 . 7/24
I want gotta know... Is this complete?
David Garrido chapter 48 . 7/23
Kagome and sango, Kikyo and sango, kagura and sango or kohaku and sango
DarkHeartVenerable chapter 13 . 6/28
There NO Romance at all. As I only see time skip. And isn't Jaune relationship with his girlfriend too fast?. And how about Ren? He just sitting there with his girlfriend Nero and out of nowhere, he gets a girl without talking to them?

I don't know why but I'm irritated at this fanfic because of the romance and plot
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