Love it! :D Forseti gets to be a badass and a kind helper.

Loved it

This is an amazing starting chapter for a story it has peaked my interest I hope to see more of this amazing writing in future updates.

Please have the Agsard Return (in a sequal) with an Asgard fleet and kick the colective Asses of Clarks Regime and The Asshole First Ones AKA Vorlons and Shadows.

An interesting scenario with great Asgardian captain.

Excellent

Good story. I liked it.

Excellent.

Nice

"If he hadn't of been so distracted, he would have been prepared."

What's strange here is you've made a mistake in the first half of the sentence that you actually got right in the second half... but the error could have been avoided in the first place since it was redundant anyway.

"If he hadn't of been" is "If he had not of been"
As you can see, that makes no sense. "Of" is not a verb, it's not an action you can take; you can't "of" something. You can "have a drink" but you can't "of a drink."

Any time you think you heard someone saying something like "should of" "could of" "might of" "may of" "will of" or any similar statement, what you actually heard was "should've" "could've" and so on.

And, since "'ve" is short for "have" we get "should have" "could have" and so forth. "Have" IS a verb, it is an action; you can "have" something. Oddly, you turned right around and got this right with "...he would have been prepared."

Correcting the initial error makes the sentence look like this...
"If he had not have been so distracted, he would have been prepared."

"Had not have" is an ugly turn of phrase already, and "had not have been" is even uglier. All of this can be avoided, though, since that first "have" is redundant.

So, the corrected sentence (without the contraction, since I try to avoid them outside dialogue) would be...
"If he had not been so distracted, he would have been prepared." (Or the even shorter "Had he not been so distracted, he would have been prepared.")

Which, while sort of an obvious statement, is at least grammatically correct.

Not trying to put you on the spot or anything (I read and enjoy your HP stuff and, while I don't normally read non-HP fan fic, I made an exception since you're on my author alerts), but I see this "have" versus "of" error so often, I feel like I should try to get the information out there for people to see (and hopefully learn and pass along) as often as possible... before teachers and dictionaries start teaching it the wrong way, just so everyone can be right, like they did with "flout" versus "flaunt."* ~shudder~

This pervasive culture of "everyone gets a medal, just for participating" should not apply to grammar.

Anyway, thank you and keep up the good work!

*For the record, everyone, to flout is to show a rebellious disregard for something, while to flaunt is to show something off. You might flaunt your wealth by purchasing a new sports car, but you flout the rules when you drive it too fast.

xxx Kudos xxx : )

I really like it. I hope you continue it to a long story. Maybe let the asgard come back or something like that.

Ah! There is nothing like seeing the Minbari swallowing their own medicine. How very nice.

Forgotten just how much I liked Babylon 5, well done on integrating it with the Stargate universe and Asgard. Any chance of more in this vein? (hint there)

That's really good. If it continues I'd definitely read it. Note that I like gaint space battles.