Reviews for A simple game
jabbarulez chapter 4 . 2/12
I love it! I can just imagine the Atlantis Expeditions reactions to learning that a group of British teens are, essentially, running amok in the Pegasus galaxy. Can't wait for more!
PegasusPilot chapter 2 . 2/5/2017
First chapter was a bit hard to read, second chapter much better, perhaps try to use a horizontal line or some symbols to separate different parts of the story, like when you switch from one perspective to another, and to separate your author notes from the story. Perhaps apply for a beta reader to help make the grammar and sentence structure better? Otherwise the second chapter was better, the details of the game and the class was better written and more interesting than chapter 1, so I will read more if you write more because it has potential to be good.