Reviews for Hermione's Future |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Disgusting and perverse. After only scamming the last few chapters I stop reading here. In the beginning I enjoyed the plot, but after Hermione's return, it gets worse by the chapter. Furthermore, the grammar is abysmal. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my god. I’m bawling. Poor Hermione, Severus, James, Lily, Remus and Sirius. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story. I can't wait to be able to read more of your stuff. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this story can't wait for the sequel! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hello author. I love your story. Reading comments about your mistakes can be painful. trust me i know. but i hope that you see the positive comments. they only commented that for you to be a great author. Looking forward on your other works! |
![]() ![]() Cute SS/HG story, but I felt there were many grammatical and a few plot errors throughout the story. You used the word 'got' WAY too often... it should be 'have' in most cases you used it. There were a few discrepancies between the past and conversations/ interactions in the present, but not enough to deter me from reading your story. Over all it was an interesting story that had many plot twists and characters. Thanks for taking the time to share it. |
![]() ![]() I don't think I can do another 30 chapters of the grammar. Someone is "passed out", not "past out". Your verb tenses are all over the place - sometimes present, sometimes, past, sometimes present perfect, and often in the same sentence. "Those" is plural - "We don't use those kind of words" is incorrect. It should be "We don't use that kind of word." "I'm not for sure" is incorrect. Should be, "I am not sure" or "I'm not sure". Thanks for sharing your story, but it isn't for me as I can't get past the grammar. Best of luck! |
![]() ![]() "Casted" is not an English word. The past tense of "cast" is "cast". Again, good plot and content, but the (many) grammar errors are a problem. |
![]() ![]() I am enjoying the story, but the grammar errors are jarring. "I got to..." Is never correct. It's always "I have to..." Or "I have got to..." - or better, given that this is supposed to be a posh British public boarding school, "I must..." It may be a minor nit in the overall scheme of things, but it's so out of place in an otherwise well written story that it truly is jarring. The story is better than the grammar. A good editor/beta reader could easily fix these problems and elevate the story from "good" to "great". That said, thanks for sharing it - I am enjoying it so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loving this as well as enjoying it |
![]() ![]() ![]() The timeline is so rushed. I don't like to review until the end but I just keep having a hard time ignoring it. They're best friends, significant others, and saying they love each other within days of meeting. It's so far occ my brain is refusing to accept it haha. I'm going to finish and form my thoughts then! |
![]() ![]() ![]() wonderful way to wrap it all up |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good, please update the next chapter quickly! Happy Father's Day! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a wonderful story, so happy for Hermione and Snape |
![]() ![]() ![]() *tears stream down face* I don't want it to be over! Can't wait to read the next one! |