Love this story!

dropped 8/47, its not for me.

please updated

Love it. Can't wait to see what happens next

Update

Ugh! I knew it wasnt done but still I read it, is there any hope of an ending?

Please update this story is good and want to see what happens next

Please continue the story. Very interested to know what would happen next.

Please continue the story I would love to read more

I see you have not posted a single one of my reviews. That’s fine. As long as YOU received them and can hopefully improve your writing. You can not improve if you do not know what you are doing wrong.

This could be a wonderful story, if only you could learn proper English grammar. Your storytelling is good, your ideas are somewhat unique (hard to do with so many Harry Potter Fan Fictions), and I would like to see where you are taking these characters.

Buy a book. Any book that had a professional editor. I hear J.K. Rowling has some good ones. Read it. Pay attention to the grammatical rules.

I hope you keep writing. Your imagination is enviable. Your grammar leaves much to be desired.

Thank you for your contribution to the world of Harry Potter Fan Fiction.

Not only is your grammar in desperate need of assistance, now you are misspelling canon names. What is the name of the French school? Who is the head of Ravenclaw? What is Ronald’s last name? Perhaps you need to read the books again. Poorly done!

This chapter has 13 apostrophe errors. 21 other grammatical errors. Wrong words, extra letters, missing letters, missing words, improper commas, missing capitals, wrong tense verbs.

This chapter alone has 19 missed or misused apostrophes. As well as 17 other various errors including (but not limited to) mistaken homonyms, missed capitals, misused or missing commas and missing letters within words.

Either you are not paying attention or you just don’t care that your grammar is so poor.

You have some truly excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I am enjoying. However, your English skills need some strict attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are NO apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe (with a few exceptions: his, hers, ours, theirs).

Gryffindors, stairs, Grangers, ideas: all plural. No apostrophes. Sometimes, in English, we change the word itself to make the plural: mice, men, elves, children, stories. No apostrophes. Some words are also their own plurals: moose, fish. No apostrophes. Cat’s paw, ministry’s policy (one policy of one ministry), ministries’ policies (more than one policy of more than one ministry), night’s sleep, harm’s way, Potters’ family’s fortune: all possessive, all require an apostrophe.

Proper nouns need capital letters. Buy a grammar primer. Study it. Proper grammar can only improve your storytelling.

You wrote: “ Harry watched this and was Harry the chair he had summoned send to appease Tom.”. What is that even supposed to mean? A beta who reads, writes and speaks English would greatly benefit you.

You wrote: “… if he had really created so many of the abdominal things.”
You need to pay more attention to the words you type. This is definitely not the only error of this type. There are also numerous apostrophe errors. Further proofreading is required.