Reviews for Expense of Memory, the Silent Survivor
6f5e4d chapter 6 . 2/15
This sixth chapter is a good chapter, nice job
6f5e4d chapter 5 . 1/12
That's very interesting, how that Confuciusornis brought the Dimetrodon in to eat the Leeches, and it looks like some Swamp Fever might be popping up now, nice job on this chapter
ImagMaster chapter 5 . 12/25/2017
Not to be impatient, but get to the dinosaurs already!
jack6042 chapter 5 . 12/23/2017
Awesome story but I have to ask if he does get games please don't let them die I know it happens a lot in ark but I just really get attached to mine good story though
DaRumpyBurr chapter 4 . 11/17/2017
After a few sentences, it was immediately evident that this revision is exponentially better than your previous version. There are way less gramatical errors and mistakes in general. I can see that you've paid much more attention to detail, specifically to your descriptions, which I would consider on par with my own.

Plot wise, it is very interesting to see how this version of events unfold much more gradually than before. Though I might have a general idea of where this story is going, it still captivates my attention nonetheless. As for the Moa, it was wise of you to introduce and kill it so quickly. It really demonstrates the dangerous aspect of ARK. Personally, I like to develop my characters and then murder them in the most heartwrenching ways to make my readers suffer... but that's just me.

Keep up the good work!
ItsJustCrow chapter 4 . 11/12/2017
great chapter. and omg I'm dying. you used my random comment as a quote. it's perfect. I guess I can provide actual quotes now. “Life isn't always about thought out strategy and calculations, sometimes you just gotta rush everything head on and hope that at least one out of three parts of your plan goes right”
6f5e4d chapter 4 . 11/8/2017
That was pretty cool, stealing honey from Giant Bees and managing to escape in the process, this is a great chapter
YoUrCrAzYnEwNaMe chapter 3 . 10/17/2017
sad but good
ItsJustCrow chapter 3 . 10/15/2017
Well that didn't last long at all. I expected at least a chapter with Big Bird but nope. he dead. gone. no longer on Sesame Street.
6f5e4d chapter 3 . 10/8/2017
I'd definently imagine Hesperornis Egg would be good, not just for humans but for Moas as well, nice job on this chapter
6f5e4d chapter 2 . 10/5/2017
Good job, this new take on your ARK fanfic is a lot more detailed than the earlier draft, and it appears to utilize more of the animals from later versions of the game like Hesperornis, or Electrophorus
6f5e4d chapter 1 . 10/1/2017
Nice work, l can recognize the name Dialect, the name of the parrot in this draft, as the name of the Confuciusornis (a real life extinct bird that is a fanmade animal for ARK) from your earlier draft, I can also kinda recognize some Australian stuff in this, the brown snake was likely the Eastern Brown Snake, one of the world's most venomous snakes, it makes sense for a Red Fox to be in here because they were an introduced animal to Australia, either way good job in this revision
Shadowhawk3938 chapter 17 . 9/8/2017
As stated in one of the Helena notes: the coliseum city in the scorched earth desert was destroyed by the Obelisks, mean civilizations aren't allowed to grow in Ark
ItsJustCrow chapter 21 . 8/6/2017
Great story. I haven't played ark in forever so if I do make suggestions they'll be based off of mythical creatures and such if that's ok with you. Keep up the great work.
DaRumpyBurr chapter 20 . 8/2/2017
New character, some backstory, an action scene and Austin's rescue. Overall, a nice addition to your story. Thanks for giving some information about the history of the world, and I especially liked how you put it in a book. I've racked my brain for boss suggestions, but can't think of anything. I'll let you know if I come up with something later. Anyways, good chapter and I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next!
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