Oh my gosh I’m dying! I loved this entire story. It was so funny and fluffy! I think my favorite part is when Erin says to Holtz, “Shut up and keep kissing me, hot blonde one.” I actually laughed out loud at that; it was just too darn cute! Although, a close second favorite for me was when Kevin was described as “going rogue” at the Pride parade. I could see the mayhem caused by both situations.

My only complaint, if one can really call it that, is that it was over too soon! I would have loved to see more of Holtz flirting with Erin, as well as Erin’s responses. It would have built up the later moment between the two of them a little bit better.

Other than that, this was an outstanding story! The story was polished and well-written; I didn’t notice any SPaG errors. I loved every moment of this. Well done!

This was so funny.

I loved it! I love Kevin and his naive personality.

Good job!

Goldilocks775