|Reviews for The Coming of Lance|
| Flare Phoenix chapter 1 . 10/22/2006
Don't take this the wrong way but your character seems very close to being a Gary Stu, I haven't read the next chapter so i can't say for sure. But even if the Liger Zero was having problems, there is no way that an OC would come out of nowhere and defeat all 4 members of the Blitz Team as easily as he did.
Also, you made no mention of the Liger Zero having any problems in the fight against Lance (side from Panzer's usual problems) so that couldn't really have been a factor.
You're writting is good and I like the Zoid Battles, just the fact that your OC defeated four very good pilots by himself. Anyway, if you want to reply to me calling me a stupid idiot and commenting that i have no stories of my own, then feel free, everyone else does anyway. Of course, if you want to rebut or discuss anything I've said then that's ok to. Or if you want to explain it to me in a way that makes it more believable. Well anyway...
| Toki Mirage chapter 2 . 6/16/2003
that last attack was swet...
lance is out!
poor guy, but man, he's so col! *all excited*
i saw that you had no chapters on this story, so i decided to review!