|Reviews for The Beldam's Return|
| Lotte chapter 2 . 9/7
Not enough for me to judge just yet, but I tend to enjoy stories like these, in which the Beldam returns for revenge (or whatever), best, so I hope u keep writing. I'm curious to see where this goes.
| deanine chapter 1 . 7/23/2017
The summary sounds interesting but you haven't gotten far enough in for me to have a feel for where you're going.
Constructive comment: you're having significant dialogue format and punctuation issues.
Correct, basic dialogue format: "I can't," she said.
As a general rule it's best to keep dialogue tags short and sweet, but you can tie in action from time to time, but if the action is from a character that didn't speak the dialogue, steer clear. It becomes muddled.
Happy writing and peace!
| ghuterpie chapter 1 . 6/28/2017
yes continue please
| brooklynnthemajesticdragon chapter 1 . 5/18/2017
Great story so far. Please continue!