Reviews for The Beldam's Return
deanine chapter 1 . 7/23/2017
The summary sounds interesting but you haven't gotten far enough in for me to have a feel for where you're going.

Constructive comment: you're having significant dialogue format and punctuation issues.

Correct, basic dialogue format: "I can't," she said.

As a general rule it's best to keep dialogue tags short and sweet, but you can tie in action from time to time, but if the action is from a character that didn't speak the dialogue, steer clear. It becomes muddled.

Happy writing and peace!
ghuterpie chapter 1 . 6/28/2017
yes continue please
brooklynnthemajesticdragon chapter 1 . 5/18/2017
Great story so far. Please continue!