|Reviews for Invictus|
| Guest chapter 3 . 9/28
Good story update soon!
| davycrockett100 chapter 3 . 9/26
| SeigZeon chapter 1 . 9/12
I like it :3 love harry attitude
| monkey kix ass chapter 3 . 9/5
hmm, with the current conflict between harry and robert, i wonder what will happen when the war is officially over and the rebels have won. hopefully harry's plan to save the princesses and prince will be successful. anyways, enjoyed reading what you've written so far. hope you get around to updating again soon.
| Guest chapter 3 . 9/1
If Harry does manage to save Elia, Rhaenys, and Aegon, maybe he can open trade between the Vale and Dorne to his benefit...which will help in his quest to modernize his land. And with him alive and heir to the Vale, maybe Ned will decide to foster Jon Snow at the Eyrie? Highborn bastard sons are often fostered with other lords and even squire for them. It would keep Catelyn Tully from crushing the spirit out of him.
And as for modernizing the region, maybe he should provide a teacher (not necessarily a maester) to all villages and keeps of the Vale to teach all of the children how to read and write, as well as basic math skills. An educated populace is a populace that will serve the kingdom better and more productively. It could be like the schools in the 1800's, have the children farm or work in the morning and go to school to become literate and learn to fight in the afternoon? If all of his smallfolk are taught how to use weapons from childhood, when war comes, they will be a more effective fighting force than the other kingdoms who just take untrained farmers and fishers and give them spears.
And since so much of the Vale is mountains, maybe he will search out valuable minerals and metal ores? He could make a fortune from that and lessen the power of House Lannister at the same time!
And he should at least try to make alliances with some of the mountain clans. Not sure if you know, but during the Andal invasion of the Vale, the First Men who refused to bend the knee after the Andal Ser Artys Arryn won the Battle of the Seven Stars were forced off their fertile lands into the harsh Mountains of the Moon and later became the clans. Tyrion bribing some of the clans with money and armor proves that they can be reasonable with monetary incentive, so Harry should get at least half of the clans on his side by raising some of them to noble Houses and letting them get wealthy from the mines. He could also provide them with goats and sheep to herd so that they have something to live off of and sell. They only became bandits and raiders because everything was stolen from them and they were forced to a place with little opportunity. If Harry gets some on his side, he can wipe the rest out and then the Vale will be more productive because they don't have to worry about raiding! Plus, the clans-turned Valemen would provide even more troops for Harry's army, making the Vale even stronger militarily.
On that note, will Harry create cannons? If he did, the Vale would never have to worry about bleeding his army while laying seige to a castle...he could just blast right through the gates of even stone walls. And it would make him a super power in terms of naval ships as well...and keep pirates from disrupting trade which equals more money.
| Addlcove chapter 3 . 8/27
interesting so far, looking forward to reading more
| SarahTaylorTam chapter 3 . 8/27
This looks like an interesting story. I like the idea of improving things and the sort of base building idea. Having said that I hope you don't jump them to far forward that would seem unrealistic and op. But you could make improvements to industry, engineering, building and the economy. On the military side you could improve the equipment and make it standard all across the army. Like chain mail or plate rather than leather and a mix of hodge podge armor and weapons. Also you could make them more organised and trained than just leves house armsmen and then the nobles with all the disparity that brings. Basically a more professional army, that and standardised better equipment would make a big difference. A small well equipped and trained force can make a big difference. This will have to be the case in a way because of the overall limit of men the Vale can field without taking away from the infrastructure basically a population limit. They will never be as big or resource rich as other kingdom's.
Anyway sorry for going off on a rant. This is a good story you are the author and can write what you want and I will read it. Hopefully Harry can have a positive impact on the story, prevent some of some of the stupid things that happened in cannon and improve their odds against the other. Can't wait to see where you take this keep up the good work.
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/26
Robert never deserved the Iron Throne.. I'm hoping somehow everyone else realizes that he doesn't have the temperament to lead the seven kingdoms. Thanks so much for posting this story! It's brilliant ;)
| Rob chapter 1 . 8/26
| kirashu chapter 3 . 8/25
This is good, really good story so far. I'm totally hooked right now and hope to read more soon. I like Harry's opinion of Robert, Rhaegar and Lyanna the stupidity and pride of this three basically doomed the kingdom by painting it bloody red.
Again, i'm seriously looking forward the next chapter, this story is great plus if like you said, big changes are coming, hell yeah.
(We already know that there is no Lysa " Arryn " and that Varys is interested by Harry's ancestry, that alone are things to look out in the future, i'm so impatient to read the next chapter and the conclusion of this war).
| Beloved Daughter chapter 3 . 8/25
Cool story! I can't wait to read more!
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/24
Hope you have Harry be disdainful about Lyanna. A lot of fics hype her up. But the truth is a lot worse.
Also... will Ned/Ashara be a thing?
| Cool-story-bro WD chapter 3 . 8/24
Very excited for an update. There aren't many Harry Arryn stories that are written well and I'm excited to see what direction you take this story in.
| Qinetiq chapter 1 . 8/24
Typical Harry Stue. Not impressed, not interested.
| ThelonewolfNT chapter 3 . 8/22
I hope Harry saves the kids.