|Reviews for Chuck Versus The Man Who Never Was|
| berksboy chapter 10 . 7/14
Holy shit, no, didn't see that coming, now I'm really friggin confused, I guess patience is a virtue.
| berksboy chapter 9 . 7/14
This is becoming a really decent but slightly confusing story (I will alaborate on that shortly) to the point and I've probably put it in other reviews where I have difficulty putting the story down, so to speak.
Where I'm a bit confused is I thought Karen (The nurse) has met Ellie/Rachel, Devon/Eric and Morgan/James and Karen (The nurse) the met Ellie/Devon/Morgan/Casey and Sarah, is one Karen an actor whilst the other Karen is off duty
Anyhow must read on, kudos to WvonB.
| Guest chapter 4 . 7/13
AH, and now everything is turned on its head and the shoes are more understandable. Nevermind, lol.
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/13
Seems pointless to comment on a year old chapter that won't get revised. But, perhaps I can save you from making the mistake in the future?
Namesake - it does not mean to share a name by chance. It means the person (or thing) someone (or some thing) is named for. I doubt Stephen and Mary Bartowski decided they liked a certain brand of shoes so much they would name their baby after it. So his chucks are not his namesake chucks. You might be going for: wears so much he is associated with - which is more of a trademark or hallmark or words to that effect. Like (if your old enough to remember) how in the 80s, Michael Jackson was never seen without his one white, rhinestone glove. It was his hallmark. But I think theirs a better word for that, too.
But, as Chuck was not named for the shoes, and vice versa, then calling them his namesake shoes is just patently false and wrong. A namesake would be the rockstar that my brother named his son after. Actually, two namesakes, as two different singers became his first and middle name. Likewise, if someone names their kid for a family member (such as an Aunt, Grandfather, etc.) or old friend of the family, the person for whom they are named for is their namesake.
| berksboy chapter 4 . 7/13
Oh Man, this is good so far, do I get it, I'm not sure, So Chuck doesn't really have a Sister because if he does she's now lying to him, shit, am I sounding dense?
Guess I'll have to read on, nice job Wayne
| berksboy chapter 2 . 7/12
First chapter i thought was very well written, towards the end the theme kind of sounded familiar, but
i was intrigued to see where it was going, this chapter also well written but my hunch may be proving to be right, i'll carry on at the moment at it may have a different angle.
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/22
Really good start
| phathead01 chapter 13 . 4/9
Read both. Great reading. Thank you
| Dave chapter 1 . 1/8
I've enjoyed a lot of stories before, but this is the first time I've felt compelled to write a review just to say your writing is excellent. I've never been so hooked from so early on. Fantastic first chapter and superbly written.
| xxx Rob M xxx chapter 13 . 12/18/2017
I don't have nearly as much to say here. I just wanted you to know how much I enjoyed the Carmichael side of the story. It really did ask some interesting questions, and that's always the thing I look for in Chuck stories.
I think Sarah's fears are well grounded and logical. She's fallen in love with two different versions of Chuck and lost them both. She's changed and grown as a person over the last several years and can't go back to the woman who was married to Carmichael. That would seem like an overwhelming hurdle to overcome, and you can understand why should would be tempted to just try and get away from all of it.
Chuck's right though, this third version is exactly who she should be with. One who knows who she was, but one who can accept that's she's different. She carries some scars now that she never carried before.
...really great stuff all around! You should be very proud of this story!
| xxx Rob M xxx chapter 12 . 12/18/2017
Hey, sorry it took me so long to get around to this review
...anyway, this was the chapter I really wanted to comment on in regards to a couple of things, and nothing I say is really meant as a criticism, so much as it is just a couple of thoughts to ponder over for the new story.
First I wanted to give you credit on writing some solid actions scenes. I know they're not as easy as a lot of people think and you did a really good job with them...especially given that you don't usually do a ton of action in your stories.
One thing I did want to encourage you about though, when it comes to action scenes, is don't be afraid to go against expectations. I'm assuming you're familiar with the old Bond movie "The Living Daylights". Remember when the main henchman Necros, breaks into the MI6 safe house and gets discovered by a random, no-name agent? What followed was a really intense, brutal fight between two evenly matched opponents. The point being to show just how highly trained ALL agents were, not just Bond. It not only made for a tense scene, but it made Necros look even more lethal when he won. In your story, Agent O'Reilly, as a veteran NSA officer, would have fit this kind of role perfectly when he confronted Sarah.
There's nothing wrong with having Sarah or Casey work a bit in their fights. The show was always very good about this, and it was the reason why a lot of the Fulcrum villains are remembered so well. They were shown to be actual threats, not just as a group, but one-on-one, as individuals.
In the confrontation with Beckman. I understand what you were going for, basically a way for her to get her comeuppance. I feel like having her be intimidated by Sarah as thoroughly as she was though, doesn't fit her character very well. I think as fans we tend to forget that not only did Beckman become a Brigadier General, and head of the NSA despite what was most likely an "old boys club", she was also an accomplished field agent during the cold war. Beckman has most likely been eyeball to eyeball with people every bit as lethal as Sarah and not lost her cool. Having her be outmaneuvered by Chuck and Sarah is one thing, but at the same time you want to keep Beckman looking strong as a character.
I think you hit Sarah's fears about her relationship with Chuck right on the head. The belief that she doesn't deserve good things or to have good people love her. The only thing I'd add to that is that it's important that Sarah resolve that herself. Chuck's love for her is what gives her the strength to believe in herself, but ultimately that's still a battle that she has to fight alone.
..really strong story overall. It kept me interested all the way through
| sharpce chapter 14 . 12/16/2017
What a real great story! I'm looking forward to the sequel, can't wait to read what you're going to put chara in this time! Great writing and a genious plot. THX
| ChuckAddiction chapter 14 . 11/30/2017
Brilliant! Another masterpiece. Many thanks for writing this. Looking forward to more... with hope!
| Grayroc chapter 14 . 11/25/2017
Thank you for another beautifully written and a most unique FF story. Also a tip of the hat to your beta reader.
I know other readers have tended to favor either the Carmichael or the Bartowski line but I think it’s neck and neck. Each story line, the B or thr C , on its own would be a great story for this site.
| sevenrez chapter 13 . 11/24/2017
Wow it was like hell for Sam. awesome ending. Thank you!