Fudge is the Minister For Magic, not the Minister of Magic.

No, Dumbledore is a manipulative bastard who condemned too many people to death along with Harry to years of child abuse.

FYI Dorea was Harry's great grandmother not his grandmother.

this don't make sense, sirius shouldn't be able to have a child either of Rabastan in infertile from azkaban

For the developement of th;e chsracter ?! Little late for that.

Shouldn't it be Dobby is a .. rather than is the... given the Malfoy the beginning

Albus is showing signs of diminished capacity/dimentia in during his musing in the first half of this chapter. Did you realy want this.

*&%&*(%&(*% Remus the DOG.

Dang, ngl i liked the red and silver from your other book

Think im about done with this. Its getting more and more annoying. All muggles are bad, stealing Hermiones accomplishments to give them to Daphne. I have absolutely no empathy for this Harry.

Just for the record, modern ammunition generates little to no smoke when fired. The term assault rifle was a term created by liberal scare-mongers in the late eighties and there is no proper way to really determine what an 'assault rifle' really is, but I digress. Rifles dubbed with the monikers (AK47s, AR-15s, HK91s, Steyr Aug, FAFAL, etc) all utilize smokeless gunpowder which as the name suggests does not generate plumes of smoke like the older black powder. My point is that there would be no grand reveal after Dylan was barraged by a hail of automatic gunfire, everyone would see what happened.

A lot of eco rhetoric in this story.

Yep, Harry is a fucking moron. Isn't he the mastter of death? Couldn't he recall Krum's spirit and force the answer out of him?

Good lord you love exposition.

What an exposition dump