Reviews for Harry Potter: Lost Very Far Away |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I very much loved the 30 pieces of silver reference. |
![]() ![]() il faux une puissance énaurme dans le coter obscir de la foce pour alimater agnérateur rakata. |
![]() ![]() la magir dans harry potter esr un noyau magic comme une baterie sétain est plus grand que d autre .la la foce est une sorte d énérgie de l univère .si harry utilise sa magie démarer la station il mourais |
![]() ![]() téchnologie rakata est une fusion de la tèchnologie et de la foce. pour l utiliser il faux ertres un utillisateur de la foce |
![]() ![]() les rakata n étais pas des humain |
![]() ![]() There's no fucking way this story had a beta reader, unless they were retarded. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this! Thank you for writing and sharing this with us. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wasn't going to commit. but this story is crap. Writing is disjointed and hard to follow at times. I have tried to read this story 5 times. It's just not worth it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Tamora Pierce’s “Wolf Speaker,” second in her “Immortals” series when Numair Salmeline turned Trystan, a yellow mage in Emperor Ozorne’s employ into a tree when he tried to kill Veralidaine Serrasri, Numair’s Wild Mage Apprentice. He also called the magic “Words of Power.” |
![]() ![]() Things getting resolved later doesn't mean it wasn't a shit plot point, especially when it is resolved badly. |
![]() ![]() Your story is intriguing but exceptionally difficult to read. The lacking of certain punctuation, bad sentence structures, and an illogical paragraph structure is the mechanical aspect of the problem. The structure of your story seems to be that of a Japanese light novel, where nearly every sentence is its own paragraph. The other problem is the continuous time and sequence breaks with no connectivity in between, and the lack of overview of what's going on. You randomly jump from one idea to another, and often one time to another, and you give no indications of what Harry is trying to do and why. |
![]() ![]() ![]() so harrys just a evil murdering scumbag? |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was well done. An immense undertaking clearly and one of care and patience. Thank you for the joy of your words and the craftsmanship of your story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This, is a very good story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Incredible story. Thank you for this masterpiece. I totally didn't binge it over 3 days. |