more of this my good author and everything will be fine, you need more practice that is all, set yourself a time limit and push to achieve it, good or not in your eyes let us readers judge.

What can go wrong with them? I like this story already, keep up the good work!

This is just an awesome start

Somehow, this really interests me. Your writing is neat and flows well. I end up surprised that the chapter has already ended. I really do want to see how Shirou and Illya's presence affects RWBY canon. I am also curious how exactly they ended up in Vale. Keep up the good work!

I fell in love at the first chapter. Keep it up man, nice work ;)

Any update is welcome, better late than never as they say. Not too much to say about this chapter, but I think Illya was a little more timid than what I picture her to be, but you have the excuse of her being non-canon I guess. I think canon Illya is proud and wouldn't falter when faced with a thug. In fact, she probably looks down on that sort of scum the most. But that's my take on her. And I don't see anything wrong with Yang here. Thanks for the chapter.

Love it

This is really good!

Great story mate! It's really good!

Great chapter, looking forward to seeing Illya and Blake interact with each other.

What have you Done?! Ilya too damn adorable now!

Sincerely, I like the way the story goes, it's pretty cool, if for my opinion I'd like you to continue without occ, but on the way I can not complain, I hope you follow the story please and do not leave it, if you think that soon Leave it, give us an end so we can rest in peace hahaha. And anime! Keep up the good work!

Neat story, I look forward to the next chapter.

I feel like this is pretty good so you should have more confident

This was a great chapter,
Please keep up the awesome work.