so... is illya still a heartless killer? like when she killed or order berserker to kill shinji. and does she still have her familiars(birds,swords) and her mystic eye?

Shirou should bring back some homemade cookies and snacks for the girls as thanks for watching the store while he's out back.

Oh dear, they just invocked Murphy's law. Well, not to wait impatiently as the law comes into effect in the next chapter!

Lol! They're tempting fate! I curious what will happen next! Why Illya hide her powers? She knows they're in world that sometimes close to magic is very common right? Aura and semblance is similar to magecraft after all.. so it's not really surprising. Not to mention the shoulder has enemies now that they in new world.

I wonder what route this Shirou take.. is it HF? Because that's the only one I know that make Shirou close to Illya. Or is it your original route? Btw How they get to here?

a nice story has a really food start
the idea is New that's a plus
The characters are slightly off but not enough to bother except maybe illya cause she playful and sweet when she wants to be but she not the type to play the meek, a wounded gazelle for sitcoms maybe but nota push over. every story has a big coincidence but there are too many in such a short time that the situation feels force in my opinion. nevertheless like the shop "Unlimited Blade Works" in the fanfic it's new it's unique and people are just coming in interested hoping to find something good ganbatte to arngeirr: what a wonderful idea a small cafe while the customer wait for maintainence

First of all, pardon me. I don't often review chapters, and I ask that you forgive me for that. You and many other authors whose works I partake of definitely deserve my gratitude for taking the time to write and share said writing. So let me just say, that I did like this chapter - and indeed the way you've setup Shirou and Illya in particular. While we haven't seen too much of them, what we have seen feels spot on to me. Furthermore, I feel the same about Team RWBY.

In regards to Yang, I always felt that she maintains a sort of light-hearted, albeit severe protectiveness of Ruby. She watches her sister like a hawk, but covers her doting up with her sense of humor and teasing - which is something I felt you conveyed fairly clearly in this chapter. Yang's a clown, but can be perceptive when she wants to be - although not necessarily in battle. This is especially true when Ruby's involved.

On that note, that does provide a way for Yang and Shirou to connect. They can bond over their sibling duty to protect their "younger" siblings.

In any case, I digress. Thank you for sharing, and I hope you keep up the great work. I look forward to seeing where you take this.

I think we readers don't need Shirou and Illya's story before they came to Remnant. They from another world or sort is all we need to know.
Good, keep going.

Liked it? More like love it! Anything involving cute illya is automatic thumbs up

Chapter was fine, though Illya was very OOC. I get she's trying to keep her abilities hidden, but she is the furthest thing from a defenseless girl. Like Shirou, she's a killer, and a group of thugs wouldn't be something she'd be worried about.

Murphy's Law is gonna hit hard because there's three/four people thinking the same thing. If you're stuck, sometimes it's good to put up a poll on your profile and put that in your AN so you have a direction to go, generally...
Anyways...this chapter feels off because only plot has progressed along with some character relationships. No character development as of yet (except for maybe the AN) but I guess more will come. In general, this story's progressing fine; just watch out for when those flamers hit you.
A few ideas that may do well:
Get Shirou to open a restaurant of some sort adjacent to the weapons store. How? That's for you to decide. The smell of the dishes will of course attract tons of customers. Afterall, Hunger is the Enemy.
It might do well for a short battle to occur so we see where Shirou and Illya rank in RWBYverse and how they stack up against aura and semblances
P.S. Does this version of Illya have a KaleidoStick of any sort?

This is a great story, and I can honestly say I'm loving it so far. I'm very happy rather than just going the route of 'Shirou goes to beacon' or some variant you've taken Illya and Shirou in a completely different direction. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this story for updates.

I feel bad for anybody that is going to fight this version of Shirou.
Miyuverse Sh(M)irou is just way to OP. Here is a list of abilities and weapons
-Diving Construct Tracing (Without dying)
-Incredible Stamina (Soloed the entire 5th Holy Grail War in one night right before challenging Gilgamesh Install Angelica Ainsworth right after with no rest)
-Kiritsugu's Origin Bullets (Momento from Kiritsugu)
-Kotomine Kirei's Black Keys (Bought some from Kirei)
-Crazy Durability (Tanked a Enuma Elish head on)
-Double the Magic Circuits (Absorbed EMIYA Archer's magical circuits and his skills and experiences)
-Servant Stats (Literally has the stats of EMIYA Archer due to installing his card and retaining them because they are the same person)
-Inifinite Mana (Pretty much Affection of Holy Grail Rank EX)
-Everything (Has the abilities of the three Shirou from the main series except he can do it even better)

More of this please.

A tip from someone who Experienced something similar to your situation:
Nothing is perfect in this Mortal World, we can only make the Best of what we have.
now unto my review:
first off - OMG! AN UPDATE WOOOOHH!
Secondly - that cliffhanger
thirdly and seriously - there are some grammar errors in there but not too noticeable, hope you don't make both Shirou and Ilya too OP