Reviews for Elsa and Anna's First Day Out
HardyGirl17 chapter 1 . 2/1/2018
Well, okay, this is so messed up, rushed, and really short.
When the characters r speaking, u should start a new line.
For instance,
"How are you eating that so fast?! Do you not get brain freezes?" Anna asked in amazement as Elsa downed her frozen snack.
"The cold never bothered me."

Like this. You should never put the quotations in the same sentence.
I'm not being offensive. Just trying to fix a few things.
Data Seeker chapter 1 . 6/3/2017
Hi
This is a good story idea. But the paragraphs compacted together, making it hard to read. I was able to get a few things and enjoy it, but the compacting of the sentences hurt the fic.

The wholesome standards are high.

The language is clean.
Nothing is suggestively offensive.
No extreme violence or any other vile content.

I hope this review brightens your day though there is criticism. God bless

Data Seeker
Lost42 chapter 1 . 6/2/2017
Cute story