Reviews for Under control
MerryLittleMess chapter 1 . 8/18/2017
Fantastic story! I loved the tone and how you captured the characters perfectly. Moreover, I loved how Scott cared for Michael in his rough manner. Great story, for me there is only one minor problem with it: it's too short. ;)
No, seriously, thanks for sharing and I hope you continue to write for this fandom.
SpaceCowboy chapter 1 . 8/10/2017
I enjoyed your little story, but it did have a few too many grammar problems for me to love it. Check your dialogue tags... "Look at me, Damien," he said, and inwardly... Commas, not periods in most of your dialogue. That said, I loved that line from Dalton... "I'll be in my hellhole." I think you nailed the characters pretty good, and the pace was nice- not too rushed, not too slow.