Reviews for The Golden Snitch
GHRS chapter 30 . 3/17/2014
Amazing! Please finish!
Guest chapter 30 . 11/25/2013
wow I really want to read more. snape drinking tea somehow I really couldn't find it in myself to stop laughing hope u get chapter 31 soon will be waiting.
kaleidodance chapter 30 . 10/24/2013
ho...I was so trapped...I wanted it to end happyli
DerangedxandxSarcastic chapter 24 . 8/27/2013
I have to stop reading this. This story has quite a bit of potential but it is my honest opinion that you need to pay closer attention to your work. I can understand the excitement of wanting to post the chapter you just finished writing but revision of your own work is super important. There are inconsistencies with verb tenses, common sayings that are misused or weirdly phrased and sometimes very bizarrely written sentences that I had to rewrite in my head.
I'm not trying to insult or anything, clearly a lot of people have really enjoyed this story of yours. It could use some work is all. You need to pay attention to your own plot, earlier in the story Ron had his own room as head boy but in this chapter he was in the dorms. Not to mention you make your own characters rather confusing, one second Ron is completely prepared to change his own sexuality for Harry and the next he's abandoning him to the Dementors, or dropping him the moment he realizes it's Draco he was dating. I'm not saying that Ron should stick by Harry when he's with Draco, it's your story and your decision, but you have to leave hints that that will be the case. He seemed only mildly alarmed when it was a Slythering Harry was interested in, if you want him to abandon his friend then your should have had that moment be the beginning of the break between them.
Another one is the situation between Hermione and Ginny, again it is your choice if you want R/Hr to split but it has to make sense. One second they are practicing kissing for Ron/Ginny's future bf's sake and the next they are together. There needs to be more continuity in your characters mind sets, obviously you can have them change their minds as much as you want, life is uncertain and people are fickle. But I reiterate, it has to make sense.
The most obvious one to me though was Draco and Harry's reactions to one another. They clearly are supposed to be fighting their urges and willing to hurt each other a bit to get their way but you can't have them lovesick and sobbing over their loss but at the same time want them to be considered hard hearted. Again I say there has to be some continuity.
The most important thing I can say is REVISE. Be prepared to read a chapter through several times before you post it. Get it betaed, sure, but you have to do that work yourself. An outside observer can only change so much without feeling like they are overstepping boundaries. This is your work and you should make it your best.
I'm sorry if this seems harsh, I just really wanted you to know what I think. I don't think I'm above you or anything, a lot of my writing needs a lot of work as well. I'm currently revising a story I wrote years ago to make it more worthwhile.
I did like this story, in a vague sense, I just couldn't quite put up with some things any longer. Good luck with your future works.
Also, be careful when you put something in bold or italics that you change it back when you are done with it. Many of these chapters went in to italics for a thought and then stayed there until the chapter was over. It is a little bothersome.
DerangedxandxSarcastic chapter 20 . 8/27/2013
So I've been reading this story straight for hours and it is now very ate, which means actually kind of early, and I work in a few hours and need sleep so I'm stopping for now... I'm not gonna lie, I have my issues with your writing sometimes, the way things are worded, your choice of descriptors and the like. But the plot so far has kept me going, which is a little surprising, so well done. And thanks for the, so far entertaining read!
Guest chapter 1 . 4/21/2013
Guest chapter 8 . 3/27/2013
You have no idea how much I love this story 3 It's wonderful!
Guest chapter 3 . 3/27/2013
This is wonderful 3
fantasyexpert chapter 15 . 1/26/2013
Potter, you little minx.
DollyDragon chapter 30 . 12/13/2012

All you idiots who keep asking for more ... read the goddam author profile at the beginning. It's very sad and all of us love this story - but it should be pretty obvious by now that this is all we are going to get.

R.I.P. Michael. Thank you so much for leaving us this legacy which we all adore. You were extremely talented - and we're grateful.
MamaTruffles chapter 30 . 8/7/2012
:( where is the rest? This story is bloody brilliant...:)xx please update soon...:)xx
Yinzer Reader chapter 30 . 7/3/2012
I love your story and I'm worried about ff site and the MA rule. Here's a petition to help (add periods
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bluedoves chapter 30 . 5/16/2012
I am sooo sad that this isn't finished it was fantastic! And i think draco is preggers and that would have warmed me to my very core!
CoffeeCanary chapter 1 . 2/17/2012
love this story
madclifton chapter 30 . 1/26/2012
This story is SO good!

I couldn't keep my eyes off and just kept reading it.

I need a UPDATE now.

Keep it up! :)
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