Reviews for 108 Earthly Temptations |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Rest in peace vix |
![]() ![]() ![]() Best fanfic I've read so far, no ooc, or if there are, are explained via story events. The only gripe i have is that you kinda skipped over the whole jinjuriki plotline, but I only noticed after binge reading it. (barely relevant to the story anyway) WELL DONE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cool, she got to have some happiness in the end :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nicely done :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() What a neat way to circumvent nasty rumors for the Uchiha by mentioning the migraines. Neatly done :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very neat and funny lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() As per usual you pull off the au elements very well. Nicely done :) |
![]() ![]() It was fun ! Thanks |
![]() ![]() ![]() If I may, I understand your intentions with the story as well as the complaints that the story was unnecessarily fatalistic. Tera’s survival being mandated would absolutely be in violation of the theme of the story you’ve written. However, her *death* being mandated was not required to fulfill the premise either. Also, you riffed the hell out of “oh I’m so old” for like the last 6 chapters when she was barely 30. I know what you were going for was that she was deeply out of place in the kind of world she and the founders had built up in the Leaf, but the repeated age comments brought an immense pressure of fatalism. Which isn’t wrong per say, but it was flavored wrong. In the end, there was definitely no place for her, Tobirama, and their peers in this village of peace they built. It took them to make it, but it was inherently antithetical to their nature. I understand how this conflicts with a happily ever after. I think most of your readers understand too. What I think we dared to hope to see was Tera and Tobi leaving to be like, hermits in the woods or some shit. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Isn’t Tera like, 30? |
![]() ![]() ![]() “Several years over half a decade younger” Fam, you mean like 2-4 years younger? Please, this kind of wording is salad |
![]() ![]() ![]() I adore the characters, but the prose is so purple and convoluted that it becomes exceedingly difficult to follow events. I have no idea how Tera figured out who the assassin was for example. I understand that she baited him in some way, but what gave him away is completely obscure |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved Deja Vu No Jutsu, but this chapter is the most confusing prose I’ve ever read. The challenge of conveying with clarity a state of absolute confusion is obviously extremely difficult, so I don’t blame you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() just read Deja Vu no jitsu and now I'm here |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just read this again, love it! |