Why in the bloody fuck was this so rushed? So many important moments, merely given a sentence or two before moving on. You built up characters, giving them more depth than was shown in the show, and yet you waste it all? There's such a thing as spending too much time on certain parts and needing to speed up so that you're not dragging it out. This was not one of them. God, this story was seemingly so well written until this chapter. Just why? What made you feel compelled to rush such important moments? It deserved so much more, especially due to the extra life you gave to certain relationships with the mc. I feel cheated. I'm not hung up on the fact you killed off certain characters, though it still fucking sucks, it's the fact they were just glossed over in the end. I'll keep reading, and hope something comes up to make my whole rant pointless, but my hope isn't much.

I'm sorry about the last review. Even if I wasn't enjoying something it should've been said better. My intentions aside... that was a flame. Sorry.

Kind of getting sick of this "I'm a killer" wank. And I call it wank because that's how the story treats it. Otherwise he acts like the kind of person who could accept what must be done despite not liking it, but the moment he gets in a difficult conversation he starts throwing it in everyone's faces for... reasons? And then after nothing comes of it. It's to the point that in this chapter I immediately skipped the entire conversation after he said his line again. Why wouldn't I? It was far from the first time it's happened, and in the end it keeps going no where. It effectively became pointless to read when you refused to let it develop and settle. I can skip and have a pretty good idea what's happening anyway.

I sincerely hope I don't get to the last chapter and STILL find the mc going "I'm a killer you know." or "I'm the monster" or "I'm someone with blood on his hands". And those are near direct quotes to three of the many times he's done it already. The ship that is this character arc needs to land already. I'm not vibing with it at all and it feels poorly justified whenever it does comes up. Like some edge/darkness wank you keep introducing to the story to make him an antihero.

Maybe it's time to forget what you would do or feel in his shoes, because frankly you aren't him anymore. You didn't have a whole other life in that world being raised as a bender and a warrior. You didn't have to experience two decades while knowing and preparing yourself for a coming war. You're justifying his emotional issues with it originally being you, but A: You don't portray that consistently enough to feel correct and B: If he and you met you would seem like a completely alien person to him. Why wouldn't that be the case the other way around too? His mentality and thinking is too similar to ours given his life up to that point, and with everything else about him it doesn't jive with his overall character.

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Hopefully that doesn't seem like a flame for flaming's sake. It's just something that's come up repeatedly and once I decided to talk about it I wanted to cover all the other examples of it as well. It makes it seem like I'm not enjoying the story but I really am. I completely intend on finishing this and following it wherever it goes in the future. It's a great story overall.

This is the chapter I was most excited to read when I noticed it was a POV chapter. I always love seeing mc's from other viewpoints.

I hope this fic continues! Maybe he could convince the bakuda to improve the cities defences by turning the land surounding the city into a giant 200m deep pitfall trap? With the exception of the roads of course, maybe make it so that it is just strong enough to hold an army but if an earthbender were to break one of the pillars holding the ground up, it would all fall down below the army at once! Maybe he can get them to practice flinging their rocks at clouds? See how far they can fling them and how accurate they are? Would be very good anti air if they can outrage the fire nation, maybe he could do the same for the north water tribe? And if their range isn't good enough them get them to build a ring of small mountains with a cliff-face on the outside (with the exception of a couple small roads that can be collapsed) to both fire off of and keep the fights away from the civilians.

yes, like ugsoul said mai x kaito is best so far
so, no need zuko x mai bullshit.

I want him to be with May. They are perfect for each other.

I knew there would have been have been a scene about Sing Se is leading good

I have to agree he's been a pain to Ty Lee

Wow, this is a great story and Book 1 was done good .. looking forward what's going to happen next in his trip now

honestly, this is like the most bullshit thing ever. hahn die is okay but the Spirit still die too? that's bullshit like it is out of convenience. like you make us accept Zhao have a backup plan like this? someone prideful, ambitious have a backup plan and let someone take the glory?

i missed the old days in the sea with mc and the crew, i dont know what but that part is just gold, and the mc is just being himself in the sea not baby sitting a bunch of kids, so yeah the story is much better when he isn't with the gaang.

Mmmmh~
Mind controlled Ty Lee. That's my fetish.

yay! new chapta ! awesome

Excellent chapter, I hope Ty Lee is safe and not brainwashed...