Reviews for The Pretense
Seniia7 chapter 2 . 6/28/2020
he's an idiot
Seniia7 chapter 1 . 6/28/2020
does hermione turn dark?
Alyce and Indi chapter 50 . 5/27/2020
I love these scenes! I'm not sure which one was my favorite, but I'll definitely remember Dolohov's. Knew something like that'd happen. (I so love the one with Moody!)
Alyce and Indi chapter 49 . 5/27/2020
So that's what Hermione added! Marvelous, simply marvelous. Heh.
Alyce and Indi chapter 47 . 5/27/2020
But...they've only got three chapters left. I know you're a great writer, but it still feels like not enough time.
Alyce and Indi chapter 45 . 5/27/2020
Draco's interactions with Harry and Ron are perfect. And Hermione is so clever. And oh dear, Lestrange is...well the word 'cuckoo' comes to mind, but at least he's happy.
Alyce and Indi chapter 41 . 5/27/2020
Hermione, you're always on the side it's "okay" to hate because you're always trying to do the right thing. You're braver than you know. Braver than most other people, fictional and real. It's a pity I'd have to break the fourth wall to tell you I admire you, but don't worry. The characters in your story will come around eventually. Some-like Draco and Percy-already have.
Alyce and Indi chapter 40 . 5/27/2020
Those witches don't know how stupid cornering Hermione Malfoy was. They're lucky they didn't find out.
Alyce and Indi chapter 37 . 5/27/2020
Alyce and Indi chapter 35 . 5/26/2020
Your stories bring new life to minor characters. I think this Arabella Figg, at least, would get along well with Patricia C. Wrede's Morwen. They seem quite similar, except Morwen is a king-lecturing witch and Arabella is an artist spy.
Alyce and Indi chapter 34 . 5/26/2020
I think-I could be wrong-but I think that occasionally, a male cat can be tortoiseshell, but infertile. If I remember right. It's entirely possible that I imagined it or misremembered.
Alyce and Indi chapter 25 . 5/26/2020
Are you on FictionPress too?
Alyce and Indi chapter 24 . 5/26/2020
...and voila, the scene is set for Dramione.

My apologies. I'm seeing everything in terms of writing. I'm overanalyzing Avatar: the Last Airbender, examining Dr. Seuss' word choices (which are excellent, btw) and A.A. Milne's POV usage (1st, 2nd, and 3rd, all on the same page and all well done! He is incredible). Your story is intriguing too, otherwise I wouldn't have read this far, but I'm just getting too deep into Editor Mode.
Alyce and Indi chapter 21 . 5/19/2020
Percy really is a Gryffindor. Brave, but often stupid with bravery.
Alyce and Indi chapter 19 . 5/19/2020
What did Percy expect? I'd have thought he'd realize Hermione would choose to maintain her cover.
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